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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 19:42, 19 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do the full review shortly. To start off, by chance I found a pretty sizeable issue:

  • The quote box and the ref don't match up; I read the reference but the quote's not in there. I distinctly remember Chad saying this though, so I'm sure a different ref could be found for that.

Here's the rest of the review:

  • WP:LEAD feels a bit short. Expand if you can.
    • I expanded it a bit, let me know if that's sufficient.
  • "Moon taught himself how to play poker, although he first started playing with his grandfather at a young age." The 'although' added in makes it feel kinda odd. i feel the two points could be combined together slightly better.
  • "He started playing around 2006..." Previous sentence then contradicts this one. maybe "started playing frequently" or something similar?
  • "After 18 hours of play, Moon ended up finishing second against Cada when his Q♦ J♦ succumbed to Cada's pocket nines" If you're using the suits for one hand the suits should be used for the other.
  • "Storms Reback said Moon was "out of his league" at the tournament," since there's no wikilink for storms, a quick mention of who he is should be added.

I'll put the article on hold and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 06:31, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:53, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]