Talk:Daniel Vangarde/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Reppop (talk · contribs) 06:39, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 01:37, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Just some copy cleanup and an ask to take a look at this languishing GA with fresh eyes. Ping when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:26, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

@Sammi Brie: I've done all the copy cleanup, let me know if I've made some mistakes. reppop^talk 06:39, 4 January 2025 (UTC)

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

• MOS:GEOLINK: Probably no need to say "Paris, France" because Paris is a world city, and probably no need to link England after Brighton.

Removed both.

• The lead single, "Un Bombardier Avec Ses Bombes," Should this not be sentence case as a title in French, where work titles are sentence-cased?

I'm not sure, though it would seem so, I've changed it.

• • Also watch your logical quote setting.

I've made changes to try to adhere to it.

• They helped create the group Ottawan Who's "they"? The paragraph has only singular subjects up to this point.

Added that it was him and Jean Kluger that helped create the group.

• Vangarde recounted that a program director had dismissed the music, describing it as "ballroom music." maybe "dismissed the track" to avoid redundancy to "music" in the quote. Also might be worth noting that a program director usually is of a radio station ("a radio station program director").

Added both.

• The album was released on 25 November 2022, by on Remove the comma and "by"

Removed.

• They had one son, Thomas Bangalter in 1975, and Thoreux passed away in 2001. Move the comma to after Bangalter and be careful with your MOS:EUPHEMISMs. They had one son, Thomas Bangalter, in 1975; Thoreux died in 2001.

Replaced with suggested prose.

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 3, 7, 15, 23, 28

I couldn't view all of 3 because it is paywalled, but the other sources I was able to spot check and came out fine.

Images

All but one image is libre licensed, and that image (of Ottawan) has a VRT ticket supporting approval. There is no alt text, but it would be rudimentary in this context (e.g. Image of <band> or Image of Caraiba).

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