Talk:Daniel Parslow/GA1

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:17, 29 October 2013 (UTC) Well its a nice article for the track but still minor stuffs to look for.
Lead

• Its better to mention whom he succeeded as the captain
  • Have mentioned this in the lead, as well as in the main body as it wasn't already there. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

Cardiff City

• His trial with the Swans is mentioned but was that successful?
  • Expanded. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

York City

• Why were Greaves and McGurk out of team?
  • I think all that we need to tell the readers is that they were absent; I'm not sure that why they were out of the team is relevant in this article. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)
• Parslow and McGurk were appointed as club captains for 2009-10-Well how it is possible?One is the captain and another is vice.
  • It's certainly an unusual situation, but all I can do is go by what the source says. The source provides a quote from McGurk, and reads: "I was pretty sure he was going to keep the captain's armband because he did well with it last season but the gaffer told both of us that we're club captains." Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)
• McGurk suspended-How he was suspended?Red card or any improper behaviour?
  • Same as two points above, I'm not sure it's pertinent to this article. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

Personal Life

• An expansion will be useful.Information can be sprinkled like about his parents, fiance etc.
  • I've been unable to find anything to add, I'll keep an eye out though. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

RRD13 (talk) 08:17, 29 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2013 (UTC)

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Pass or Fail: - Nice article on a player of League Two.RRD13 (talk) 06:49, 31 October 2013 (UTC)

Thanks! Mattythewhite (talk) 12:18, 31 October 2013 (UTC)