Talk:Daniel Edlen

	Biography portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to join the project and contribute to the discussion. For instructions on how to use this banner, please refer to the documentation.BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Biographybiography
	This article is supported by the arts and entertainment work group.

Draft collaboration & comments

Declined. This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms, that are designed to promote or show-off the subject. --AmaryllisGardener (talk) 14 July 2014

Try to avoid saying things like "His work has been noted for being meticulous and hyper-realistic" and "creates art on the artifacts of creativity". AmaryllisGardener ^talk 21:27, 14 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Is http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2012/09/14/artist-daniel-edlen-paint_n_1885577.html?utm_hp_ref=arts the correct HuffPo article link? j⚛e decker ^talk 06:13, 29 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Approved. Corrections made:

During my review, I had to remove an external link from article body to a separate section. Only wikilinks should be inline.
"He" in a first sentence of a paragraph is not good style. I replaced with "Daniel Edlen".
Dedlen is perhaps a nickname, but biographies article are named in the full names where appropriate. Use "Daniel Edlen" or "Daniel Edlen (artist)".
Categories' colons removed.

If you have any questions, ask on this page. Thank you. Gryllida (talk) 10:55, 7 September 2014 (UTC)[reply]