Talk:Da Funk/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: LunaEclipse (talk · contribs) 15:46, 2 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 13:14, 16 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

While having the genres listed is good, the ones with the refs in the infobox should be written out with acid house in the body rather than invoking refs
Lengths do not appear to match the body
Mention only in the opening sentence that it is from their debut studio album, Homework (1997) and make the single release the second sentence
""Da Funk" received little attention" → "the song received little attention"
The classics sentence should be the end of the lead instead and remove the ref
"and its accompanying music video" → "and its music video" with the wikilink
"A reversed clip of "Da Funk"" → "A reversed clip of the song"
"American G-funk records: the bass was" → "American G-funk records: the bassline was" with the wikilinks
Wikilink gangsta rap
Pipe electro to Electro (music)
"Bangalter also stated that the song's melody is meant to be" → "member Thomas Bangalter also set the song's melody to be" with the wikilink
I would suggest for the acclaim and rankings, split into one sentence talking about what reviews praised about the song then another saying about rankings and listing some examples
Commercial performance should be mentioned here in the lead since the song charted in many countries later on

Pipe 12-inch single to Twelve-inch single
The anthology appearance and "Funk Ad" do not appear to be sourced
"sold 30,000 copies." → "sold 30,000 copies up to the end of 1995." to be specific

"of gangsta rap. They tried to" → "of gangsta rap, trying to" as these sentences are too short on their own
Invoke the ref at the end of any sentences using direct quotes
"it to hip hop."" → "it to hip hop"." per MOS:QUOTE
Pipe electro to Electro (music)
"aesthetic they were trying" → "aesthetic that Daft Punk were trying" as this is a new para
The riff sentence does not appear to be sourced
Try to add more info around the actual elements of the comp; for example you can take the G-funk groove, lead line and distortion pedal from Mixdown Magazine

Re-word the Music Week review to something like "the song is a refreshing release for anyone who has been" before the quote starts to avoid overquoting
"the French duo."" → "the French duo"." per MOS:QUOTE
[16] should be invoked at the first sentence of the review too
Put some of the NME review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM
"declared it as" → "declared the song as"
Put some of the ShortList review into your own words too per previous

Img looks good!
Wikilink music video
I understand the synopsis does not need sources, however you need to add a source regarding the director
Pipe anthropomorphic to anthropomorphism
Remove overly obvious wikilink on New York City
"a pair of children. He is" → "a pair of children, then he is"
"His boombox annoys a bookseller on the sidewalk from whom Charles" → "Charles' boombox annoys a bookseller on the sidewalk from whom he"
Add a dash before Tony Maxwell on the quote box to signify this is what he said himself and wikilink too
"Thomas Bangalter has stated that" → "Bangalter has stated that"

"the number one single" can you elaborate please – what year(s) or genre was this list for?
Maybe it would do good to add some of the quotes from at least a few of the rankings?
Pitchfork Media → Pitchfork and pipe to Pitchfork (website)
"In 2011, it was featured" → "In 2011, the song was featured" but this is not sourced
"Same year," → "In the same year,"
Remove wikilink on NME
"listed it in their" → "listed the track in their"
"Same year," → "In the same year,"

Copyvio score looks too high at 47.6%; please cut down the quote box from Vice to sort this out
NPR Music → NPR on ref 1
Remove the author from ref 2
Pipe IPC Magazines Ltd to TI Media on ref 6
What exactly makes Resident Advisor a reliable source on ref 5?
theguardian.com → The Guardian with the wikilink on ref 7
Pipe About.com to Dotdash Meredith and the date 2014-07-10 should be formatted consistently with the other refs on ref 9
Cite BBC News as publisher with the wikilink on ref 10
Pipe Vice to Vice (magazine) on ref 20
Ref 21 is usurped and the archive will not load
Add a work/publisher to ref 22
Wikilink SNEP to itself on ref 48
Wikilink Radio & Records on ref 54

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; I look forward to your response! --K. Peake 20:15, 16 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@LunaEclipse: I understand you may be busy however it has been 11 days now, any updates on this please since I may unfortunately have to fail if not? --K. Peake 18:29, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Fail at this point. I've been overloaded with schoolwork. 💽 LunaEclipse 💽 🌹 ⚧ ^{【=◈︿◈=】} 20:51, 27 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

LunaEclipse ✗ Fail now, if you re-nominate don't feel afraid to mention me and I'll review again! --K. Peake 17:41, 28 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]