Talk:Cyclone Geralda/GA1

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"Geralda is one of the strongest tropical storms in Madagascar." → I get what you're saying, but 'tropical storm' might be ambiguous since (moderate/severe) tropical storm is a rating on the SWIO scale. If there's no alternative, I guess you could stick with this. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Oh, I'll just use "tropical cyclone" then. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
It's outside the scope of WP:WIAGA, but it would help if you placed non-breaking spaces between dates. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- No prob! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You may be able to indicate intensities with the SWIO scale in addition to the SSHWS. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added SWIO link, and removed mention of C3. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You should probably link 'land depression' to an appropriate page, because it may confuse people for actual geological depressions in the land, which are found in texts more often than their meteorological counterparts. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Yea, I linked to TC scales here. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Since you use USDs throughout the article, it would be preferable to indicate that all monetary values are in USDs with a note, unless otherwise noted. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Sure! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

"In response, MFR upgraded the system to Tropical Storm Geralda." → You should specify what exact classification Geralda was upgraded to, since there is moderate and severe tropical storm, but no 'tropical storm.' TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Good catch. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"At 0600 UTC on January 31, the JTWC estimated peak 1–minute sustained winds of 270 km/h (165 mph), equivalent to a Category 5 hurricane." → Maybe it's just me, but it seems odd that you're linking a Category 5 hurricane link on a SWIO cyclone page to a list of Category 5 hurricanes from a completely different basin TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Haha, true. I'll fix. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"...the center Geralda passed about..." → You're missing an 'of'. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Well, you see, it was poetic, or something, and I.... uh.... ._. (fixed)♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"After maintaining its peak winds for about 18 hours..." → TAWX14 always tells me this, and I'm not sure if it is correct, but you should use terms like 'roughly,' 'approximately,' or 'nearly' in place of 'about.' This applies to all uses of 'about'. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Can I ask why? About is fine for periods of time. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - I talked with TAWX14 the other day, an he says it's fine. I wasn't sure about this issue in the first place, so I'll take his word for it. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:44, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"At around 1100 UTC on February 2, the cyclone made landfall just north of Toamasina as an intense tropical cyclone." → It would be helpful to indicate the winds and pressure at landfall. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- MF didn't say what it was exactly at landfall. What do you think I should do? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - It doesn't give winds, though it provides that the minimum pressure recorded was 943 mbar (hPa; 27.85 inHg). TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:44, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Alright, I added that, and I added the winds at 0600 before landfall. That work? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 16:30, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"About 30 hours after its first landfall, Geralda briefly emerged into the Mozambique Channel. However, a trough soon turned it to the south, and Geralda crossed over western Madagascar, reaching open waters on February 5." → You should indicate the date when Geralda moved back into western Madagascar, because the way you word this sentence makes it seem like the Mozambique Channel is a landmass and Madagascar is a sea or ocean. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Impact

You should indicate the section header as 'Impact and aftermath' since there are aftermath details there. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Mokay. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"A total of 20 National roads..." → Decapitalize 'National.' TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- K. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Due to crop damage, the price of rice increased by 300%..." → Where? Worldwide or in Madagascar alone? TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I believe it's the price of rice on Mars, but it could be just Deimos. :P (got it!) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The Malagasy government imported oil for several months while its refinery was out of order." → Just clarifying, but there was only one oil refinery in Madagascar at the time? TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 14:50, 11 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Correct. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

"The Joint Typhoon Warning Center is a joint United States Navy – United States Air Force task force that issues tropical cyclone warnings for the region." → What region?
- I thought it was obvious that it's referring to the basin. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:32, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - I guess it's obvious, so that'll be fine. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:44, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

In response, MFR upgraded the system to Moderate Tropical Storm Geralda. - Did they really? or did MFR report that the system and become a tropical storm and the Mauritius Meteorological Service name it Geralda.Jason Rees (talk) 21:00, 14 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]