Talk:Cyclone Bingiza/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanefan25 (talk · contribs) 19:59, 27 October 2011 (UTC)

• Shouldn't 2010–11 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season be linked in the lede?
• "...southwestward, failing to intensifying significantly" - I think you mean "failing to intensify significantly"
• "In a 24 hour period" - use a hyphen
• "After attaining peak 10 minute sustained winds" - same as above, between "10" and "minute"
• "...moved west-southwestward along the northern periphery of a ridge, and its convection" - what type of ridge?
• "...strengthen further due to interacting with Madagascar" - shouldn't that be "interaction"?
• "...as well as the roads and bridges, leaving it accessible by boat." - maybe say leaving it only accessible by boat? The current wording doesn't sound dramatic.
• "Across its path, Bingiza destroyed 25,464 houses[31]" - comma needed before ref
• "A total of 310 people in the southern portion of the country were homeless.[34]" - that sounds like the people were homeless before the cyclone

Alright, I got all of them. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:30, 27 October 2011 (UTC)

Great work as usual. Passing! :) HurricaneFan25 20:43, 27 October 2011 (UTC)