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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 16:27, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Will be reviewing in full shortly, but look very promising. I imagine you're heading onto to FA with this one. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:27, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Some of the image licensing needs improving:
Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:36, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
With regard to references:
  1. 51 is best removed as a tertiary and unneeded source.
    1. Fixed, as well as another to that source. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Why are #60 and #74 to the same book, and in general, whilst others have page numbers? Can one be provided?
  1. Typo in a template fixed, should display page numbers now. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Consider (not a req.) adding a translated title to references such as #98 and #99.
  1. Added. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Could you also tidy the external links; nothing major. Bucki is used as a reference and may not be suitable. Nothing is particularly necessary, but it would be nice.
  1. Bucki is really kept only for a translation, as the printed source has a fuller quote (but in Polish). --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
On prose:
  1. "confederations - legal rebellions" ~ should be a dash (m-dashes used elsewhere);
    1. I don't know how to fix dashes. They have always been an arcane mystery to me. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  2. "Józef Massalski,"~ semicolon would work better;
    1. done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  3. "The Enlightenment had gained great influence in certain Commonwealth circles during the reign" ~ I think if you dropped the first link in favour of the second, you could word it so as to be a lots less clumsy;
    1. Hmmm, ok. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  4. "eventually blot Poland from the map of Europe" ~ reword please to avoid the non-enyclopedic tone;
    1. Sounds good to me. Could you suggest a different wording? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  5. Suggestion: "1770–71", "1761–1763" ~ inconsistent;
    1. Fixed.--Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  6. Suggestion: "3 May", "May 3" ~ inconsistent;
    1. Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  7. "What was left of the Commonwealth was merely a small buffer state with a puppet king and a Russian army." ~ reword or reference;
  8. "[57] [58]" ~ space
    1. Fixed, I hope. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  9. " — " ~ should be unspaced in various places;
  10. "May 3 constitution", "May 3rd constitution" ~ inconsistent;
    1. Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  11. "130[ref]-132[ref] senators" ~ can't work out if that's a hyphen, if it is, should be endash;
  12. See if "Sejm" should be capitalised in some places it isn't;
    1. Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  13. "Some feminists might prefer "motherland."" ~ remove
    1. Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
No neutrality or stability issues.
On hold for 7 days. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 17:10, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I hope I fixed all but the dash issues, which I just can't grok. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
OK, think I got all the dash issues. I changed "blot" to "remove" – this reduces the melodrama. For the record, "blot from the map of Europe" sounds a bit like a rhetorical flourish. If you accept "remove" then I'll pass. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 15:50, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Sure. I tried for a bit more flowery language with blot, but I accept that I might have overdone it there. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me 16:14, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]