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GA Review

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Reviewer: Viriditas (talk · contribs) 01:44, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review in progress...

Lead

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  • Copyedit OK.

Plot

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  • Remmick tension of the crew, particularly when he questions the trustworthiness of the senior staff based on their personal logs and past actions.
  • Copyedit OK.

Production

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  • The creator of Star Trek, Gene Roddenberry, had specified in the series bible that there should be "no stories with Vulcans", stating that "there must be other interesting aliens in a galaxy filled with billions of stars and planets".
    • It would help to clean this up for readability and link separation: "In the "series bible", Gene Roddenberry, the creator of Star Trek, specified that stories about Vulcans should be avoided because "there must be other interesting aliens in a galaxy filled with billions of stars and planets"." I think he also said that the reason these stories should be avoided is because TOS covered this ground already and he didn't want the series to repeat itself. In any case, this is precariously close to original research as it doesn't seem to have anything to do with the episode. In such an instance, it is acceptable to add non-controversial footnotes indicating what the series bible said about Vulcans, but using this information inline presents the novel argument that Roddenberry's dictates weren't being followed. Tell me your thoughts on this. Viriditas (talk) 05:27, 20 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Copyedit OK.

Reception and home media release

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  • Keith DeCandido watched the episode for Tor.com, who questioned why the shuttlebay wasn't guarded, comparing it to a similar situation in The Original Series episode "The Doomsday Machine" and the sequence where the shuttle is bounced off an atmosphere to the "Premiere" episode of Farscape.'
    • Copyedit for clarity: "Writing for Tor.com, Keith DeCandido questioned why the shuttlebay wasn't guarded, comparing this situation to similar stories found in The Original Series episode "The Doomsday Machine" and in a sequence from the "Premiere" episode of Farscape where the shuttle is bounced off an atmosphere." Viriditas (talk) 05:15, 19 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • He said that despite Remmick being "the ultimate cliché of the jackass interrogator... And yet, I don’t actually dislike this episode and enjoy watching it."
    • This reads poorly. It could be read as "He said that", referring to the previous sentence, or it could be read as, "He said that despite Remmick being", pointing to the subsequent phrasing. It's ambiguous. Also, neither works because you don't need the "and yet". If I'm reading this right, you are trying to say, "Despite Remmick being "the ultimate cliché of the jackass interrogator", DeCandido liked the episode." Or something like that. Viriditas (talk) 05:38, 23 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    Lead OK
    Prose OK
    Production OK
    Reception and home media release OK
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
    Even though it is an internal document, add the publisher name ("Paramount Pictures") to the entry for the Star Trek: The Next Generation Writer/Director's Guide.
    Added. Viriditas (talk) 00:28, 21 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
    See note about the production section
    Moved to footnote OK
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    All problems addressed up above. If the nominator disagrees with any of these changes, he is welcome to reverse them. Viriditas (talk) 05:58, 23 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]