Talk:Comedian (artwork)/GA1
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:44, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.
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Infobox and lede
[edit]- Considering the "artwork" label already disambiguates this from other things titled "Comedian", I think the hatnote can be removed
Done --Kbabej (talk) 00:48, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
Background and description
[edit]- Me being very nitpicky: Cattelan's full name and his Italian nationality should be mentioned here to gel with the lede
Done --Kbabej (talk) 00:50, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- "duct tape" should be linked and not hyphenated, in accordance with the lede and our WL
Done --Kbabej (talk) 00:54, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- Spell out the FIAC acronym
Done --Kbabej (talk) 00:59, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- Shouldn't necessarily say "the" bananas before we know (excluding the lede) that the piece involves bananas
Done --Kbabej (talk) 15:54, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- Actually, when you read it over, nowhere her does it outright say that the piece is a banana duct-taped to the wall, only implied
Done That has been added. --Kbabej (talk) 16:14, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
Reception
[edit]- I noticed "Comedian" is not italicized in the Charney quote; I assume it also is not in the book?
Done That is correct, it is not italicized in the book. --Kbabej (talk) 15:52, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
- The resemblance to Warhol looks as if it belongs more in the background and description section, since it's less a value judgment and more an observation
Done That has been moved. --Kbabej (talk) 15:56, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
Purchases
[edit]- "swap" → "trade"
Done --Kbabej (talk) 17:23, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
Intervention
[edit]- "ate the piece, calling the intervention Hungry Artist." → "ate the piece in an intervention he called Hungry Artist."
Done --Kbabej (talk) 17:23, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
Interpretations
[edit]- Good
- Great! --Kbabej (talk) 17:23, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
Removal
[edit]- The first sentence runs a little long and can probably be split into two
Done --Kbabej (talk) 17:23, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Inconsistent use of "ArtNet" vs. "Art Net" vs. "Artnet News" throughout
Done --Kbabej (talk) 17:45, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- Similarly inconsistent use of "The Art Newspaper" vs. "The Art Newspaper" vs "www.theartnewspaper.com"
Done --Kbabej (talk) 19:58, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- USA Today should be in the work parameter, not publisher
Done --Kbabej (talk) 19:38, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- Same with Page Six, Miami Herald, GQ, Times of Israel, Eater, Vogue, and Rolling Stone
Done --Kbabej (talk) 19:38, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- [21] and [29] are missing a work/publisher
Done --Kbabej (talk) 19:38, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
General comments
[edit]- Images are properly licensed and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Earwig score looks a little high, but the "source" looks like backwards vio
Putting on hold to allow nominator to address (remaining) comments. Ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. — GhostRiver 17:16, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- @GhostRiver: Thank you for your keen eye and for reviewing this. I've made the requested changes above and caught a double ref that I combined. Please let me know if any additional changes need to be made. Thanks again! --Kbabej (talk) 19:58, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
- Thank you for making those changes. I made a brief alteration of my own to improve flow. Passing now. — GhostRiver 00:35, 14 January 2022 (UTC)