Talk:Colin Falkland Gray

Colin Falkland Gray has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Review: October 7, 2020. (Reviewed version).

This is the talk page for discussing improvements to the Colin Falkland Gray article.
This is not a forum for general discussion of the article's subject.

Put new text under old text. Click here to start a new topic.
New to Wikipedia? Welcome! Learn to edit; get help.

Article policies

Find sources: Google (books · news · scholar · free images · WP refs) · FENS · JSTOR · TWL

Aviation: Biography

	Aviation portal This article is within the scope of the Aviation WikiProject. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the project and see lists of open tasks and task forces. To use this banner, please see the full instructions.AviationWikipedia:WikiProject AviationTemplate:WikiProject Aviationaviation articles
	This article is supported by the aerospace biography project.

Biography: Military

	Biography portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to join the project and contribute to the discussion. For instructions on how to use this banner, please refer to the documentation.BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Biographybiography articles
	This article is supported by the military biography work group (assessed as Low-importance).

Military history: Aviation / Biography / South Pacific / British / European / World War II / Cold War

This article is within the scope of the Military history WikiProject. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the project and see a list of open tasks. To use this banner, please see the full instructions.Military historyWikipedia:WikiProject Military historyTemplate:WikiProject Military historymilitary history articles

Associated task forces:
/
	Military aviation task force
	Military biography task force
	Australia, New Zealand and South Pacific military history task force
	British military history task force
	European military history task force
	World War II task force
	Cold War task force (c. 1945 – c. 1989)

New Zealand Low‑importance

	New Zealand portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject New Zealand, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of New Zealand and New Zealand-related topics on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.New ZealandWikipedia:WikiProject New ZealandTemplate:WikiProject New ZealandNew Zealand articles
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Colin Falkland Gray/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:34, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Link North Sea
Link Yorkshire at the first mention, not the second
"Flying another Spitfire, he had to make a forced landing when his engine was damaged following an encounter with Bf 109s over Biggin Hill" - This still on August 31?

Yes, I have clarified this a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Gray was promoted to flight lieutenant in August 1941,[26] The same month" - Looks like this comma should probably be a period.
"Gray spent a short period of time at No. 485 Squadron, largely made up of New Zealand flying personnel before taking command of No. 64 Squadron," - Comma after personnel
"which was based in Algeria and was the first unit in the Middle East to fly the Spitfire Mk. IX" - Algeria isn't really in the Middle East

I see your point. I have rephrased this a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Although he made no official claim for this encounter,[30], " - Drop the second comma
Link George VI.
Link Buckingham Palace
If his command served at Arnhem, should Market Garden be added to the list of campaigns in the infobox?
Is there a link for secondment? If not, can you briefly gloss it?
Is cause of death known?

Unfortunately no. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Given the relative length of the article, the lead's a bit on the short side.

I have expanded the lead a bit. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

While the DNZB source gives date of death as 1 August, the Independent gives 2 August

I think that must be in error - The DNZB says 1 August as does an online record for the cemetery where he is buried. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's about it. Placing on hold for these to be sorted out. Hog Farm _Bacon 15:08, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I have actioned the above and made a few comments as well. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]