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GA Review

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Reviewer: Zmbro (talk · contribs) 13:39, 22 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


I'm bored, let's do this. – zmbro (talk) 13:39, 22 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

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  • I've gone ahead and made a few changes myself
  • Rest looks solid

Background and recording

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  • "after persuasion from Malik Yusef" can we change it to just Yusef?
  • Studios are listed here so why aren't they in the infobox?

Composition and lyrics

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  • Does Apple Music count as a source for genres?

Release and reception

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  • Section looks good

Music video

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  • "written by Elderkin and he called it" feels like a run-on sentence; I'd reword.
  • "was featured more in it before parts were taken out" reads odd. There's a better word that could be used here, right?
  • "said the mix is "gloomier and more foreboding" than the song" → "said the mix is "gloomier and more foreboding" than the original mix"
  • "to the "dark" song" can we use a synonym for dark? So we're not directly quoting one word
  • "Continuing his review, Dombal" → "Furthermore, he"
  • "She explained, depicting West's "own mug" being replaced with "a cleavage-baring, Leona Lewis look-a-like in the spooky, surreal vid" as a smart strategy from him" this whole sentence should be rephrased to something like " She felt that depicting West's "own mug" being replaced with "a cleavage-baring, Leona Lewis look-a-like in the spooky, surreal vid" was a smart strategy from him"

Live performances and other usage

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  • "campaign by performing the song" → "campaign with a performance of "Coldest Winter"."
  • Why does this whole section use his first name? This can easily be fixed just by changing instances of "Donda" to "his mother"
  • "mock snow fell down" the second instance of "fell down". I'd use a synonym

Credits and personnel

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  • Looks good

References

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  • Ref 3 doesn't need a location
  • I thought Genius was unreliable?
  • Check for overlinking (see it on ref 10)
  • Is Mind Equals Blown reliable?
  • What is One Country and is it reliable?
  • OneCountry delivers news on numerous topics, including pop culture and country music, with a team of various editors. The site is also used for prizes, but notice there is a separate domain for the news, showing the two are distinguishable. --K. Peake 16:17, 22 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Final thoughts

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