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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 02:54, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Comments by Dunkleosteus77

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  • I haven't read it yet, but the one thing I noticed was that the In research section was just one sentence, so consider expanding that (if you can); expand in areas such as: why do people research on cockroaches opposed to other insects, and what discoveries have been made (that benefit humans)
@Dunkleosteus77: Added a section on its convenience and use in education. The major discovery areas have already been listed and wikilinked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:13, 7 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • and, since the As pests and Control are basically talking about the same thing, consider merging them.
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:00, 1 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • There is a mish-mash of American and British English; I'm seeing "generalised", "generalized" (in the same paragraph), "realised", "colors", "recognize", "characterised", "specialisation", and "behavior"

Done a few edits, although I cannot guarantee that I removed all British English spelling. Please double check. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

It'll pass
Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 9 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

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In the section on biological control the ""House Centipede" namely Scutigera coleoptrata, is known to feed on cockroaches.

  • In the lead, change "...which however also includes the termites" to "...which also includes termites"
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:37, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "However recent genetic evidence..." to "However, recent genetic evidence..."
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:38, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Taxonomy and evolution section, change "...when F. A. McKittrick noted similar..." to "...when F. A. McKittrick (1965) noted similar..."
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:38, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Description section, include the weight of Blaberus giganteus
Removed mention of its weght. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:51, 3 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Description section, change :They have relatively small heads and broad, flattened bodies, and..." to "They have a relatively small head and a broad, flattened body, and..."
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:00, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Description section, change "The tegmina or first pair of wings are tough and protective..." to "The tegmina, or first pair of wings, are tough and protective..."
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:43, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Description section, change "...have demonstrated they help..." to "...have demonstrated that they help..."
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:50, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • n the Description section, change "Males have a aedeagus..." to "Males have an aedeagus..."
Done. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:43, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Collective decision-making section, explain what happened in the roach-robot experiment
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:07, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Expect more comments, I haven't finished reading yet.

Thanks for taking this on. We look forward to your additional comments. Burklemore1 (talk) 06:41, 2 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

2nd set of comments

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  • In the Social behavior section, change "...the sum of individual choices but reflects..." to "...the sum of individual choices, but reflects..."
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:08, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Social behavior section, put the last paragraph, second seconds, in quotes using template {{pull quote|1=insert quote and source}}, and also state who said it
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:22, 6 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I have stated "Lihoreau and his fellow researchers stated:", and if they didn't say it, then I don't know who did. I haven't got access to the research study. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:04, 7 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Sounds section, change "...in the presence of a potential mate some..." to "...in the presence of a potential mate, some..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Instead of wikilinking American cockroach in the Digestive track section, wikilink it in the Social behavior
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Digestive track section, change "...(Periplaneta americana) for example feeds..." to "...(Periplaneta americana), for example, feeds..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Digestive track section, change " In many species these..." to " In many species, these..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Digestive track section, change "...the wood-eating cockroach Panesthia cribrata is able..." to "...the wood-eating cockroach, Panesthia cribrata, is able..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Digestive track section, change " It my be that..." to " It may be that..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Reproduction section, change "...keeping the eggs inside their bodies..." to "...keeping the eggs inside their body..."
Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:17, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Hardiness section, change "P. japonica" to "Periplaneta japonica", since the genus wasn't stated
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:09, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:10, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Conservation section, what does NSW stand for?
Done, linked. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:11, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the In culture section, change " 'For tetanus cockroach tea is given...' " to " 'For tetanus, cockroach tea is given...' "
No, it's as it is in the original, inside quotation marks. I've added a comment to this effect. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 5 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]