Talk:Clock Tower 3/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:57, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
I'll have this done within 48 hours. I played the first one. JAGUAR 19:57, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "The plot and characters are self-contained, that is, Clock Tower 3 has very little relationship with the previous Clock Tower games" - sounds a bit informal
- Fixed.
- "Alyssa travels from her time in 2003 London to the 1940s and 1960s" - just to clarify, the 1940s and 60s are also in London?
- Yes that is correct
- The lead doesn't mention when the game was released
- A date was there, but I made it more clear
- " Alyssa Hamilton is a fourteen-year-old girl who has been living at a boarding school for three years" - "14" has been written in numerals in other cases
- Fixed
- "She runs to him and hugs him as she says "Mom...we did it. We did it, Mom."" - if this is set in London and she is presumably a Londoner, surely she would say "mum"? Feel free to ignore, I know it's not necessary!
- I watched a longplay, and you're correct! Changed.
- "The graphics and atmosphere were also well received" - de-link graphics
- Fixed
- No dead links
- No dab links
On hold until all of the above can be clarified. Nicely written throughout. JAGUAR 20:36, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing them! This is good to go now.
JAGUAR 22:45, 9 April 2016 (UTC)