Talk:Circle the Drain (Katy Perry song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Petergriffin9901 (talk • message • contribs • count • logs • email) 02:55, 1 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

How are you sure that's the actual photography if this is a promo release?

I think so because it was posted on her official website when they announced it. Plus a Hung Medien website also has it up (http://www.lescharts.com/showitem.asp?interpret=Katy+Perry&titel=Circle+The+Drain&cat=s)

I don't think "mainstream" is necessary

done

I definitely think you need to list the writers and produces in the lead

done

The song performed modestly commercially -> achieved modest charting

done

the singer on her 2011 world tour, California Dreams Tour. On the tour, the singer -> singer, tour, singer, tour

fixed

Concert reviewers had mixed feelings on her performances -> gave her performances mixed reviews

done

Background

singer Katy Perry helped write the song -> makes it seems as though she had a very trivial role in its conception.Switch it up

done

remove reportedly, and write critics suggest

done

Composition

I think a music sample would be nice here. If you need help there, just list me what part and I'll upload it for you :)

That would be lovely! The section with "You fall asleep during foreplay - I'm not gonna stay and watch you circle the drain, Watch you circle the drain" lyrics would be best because that is mentioned in the prose.

is a sneerful rant song where -> needs citation

fixed

to have techno influences in it -> to have techno influences

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All in, seventeen music engineers contributed to the track's composition -> this sentence is poorly placed. It should be back in the "Background" section, or somewhere else in the one, because you are going into critical detail, and this does not belong

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Per MoS, quotes within quotes appear in single line ("Mimi said, 'God Rachel' lol.)

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I say move that quote into the prose, and replace that spot with a music sample

Agreed

Reception

Polarized? quite vague, try something else. After reading the section, I see the reviews as pretty mixed if anything

fixed

The photo doesn't show cartoonish meant, but candy?

A steak can be seen in the right-hand corner

"Circle the Drain" offered as Perry -> "Circle the Drain" offered, as Perry

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because of such a high entry -> its kind of redundant with the following line, as you say it "the biggest jump"

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Enter the Hot 100.....?

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Live performances

the set-list

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the rafters

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References

Please fix and decipher which sources need the "Cite news" and "Cite web" parameter. As it happens to be, there is no current differentiation

~~::Oh my, that it going to be quite a pickle. I always get those two confused.... Crystal Clear x3 15:01, 6 September 2011 (UTC)~~[reply]

Okay, I think I got them figured out now. Crystal Clear x3 15:18, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

- On-hold for seven days. Good job! :)--CallMeNathan • Talk2Me 13:29, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]