Talk:Christ Church Ground/GA1
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Reviewer: Desertarun (talk · contribs) 19:18, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Will read over and post initial comments as soon as practical. Desertarun (talk) 19:18, 29 July 2023 (UTC)
- From the lead: Owing to the University Parks being on public land where an admission charge could not be levied, the privately owned Christ Church Ground was the preferred venue in Oxford for matches where a gated admission was to be levied on spectators, typically in matches between Oxford University and a touring international team. I don't really understand this, it looks contradictory, can it be clarified? Or moved out of the lead? (because it looks like a detail for the body and not necessarily a summary for the lead).
- @Dersetarun: I have rewritten the lead, making it less wishy washy and introducing some more information. I do think it is important to note in the lead its importance as a venue where an attendance charge could be levied. However, I have reduced this to read "Privately owned, it was the preferred venue in Oxford for matches where a gated admission was to be levied on spectators, typically in matches between Oxford University and a touring international team". Is that any better? StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:39, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- That's fine now. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Dersetarun: I have rewritten the lead, making it less wishy washy and introducing some more information. I do think it is important to note in the lead its importance as a venue where an attendance charge could be levied. However, I have reduced this to read "Privately owned, it was the preferred venue in Oxford for matches where a gated admission was to be levied on spectators, typically in matches between Oxford University and a touring international team". Is that any better? StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:39, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- From Host ground for touring section: Subsequent matches with admission on the gate were preferred to be played at the Christ Church Ground, with Oxford University first playing the touring Australians there in 1882 on a cloudy May day, though it was recorded that the attendance was poor. This read a bit clumsy, can it be altered?
- @Dersetarun: I have rearranged this. It definitely did read a little clumsy! StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:32, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Looks good. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Dersetarun: I have rearranged this. It definitely did read a little clumsy! StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:32, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- From the Host ground for touring section: In 1897, the ground played host to a touring besides the Australians for the first time, when the Gentlemen of Philadelphia played against Oxford University. Needs fixing.
- @Dersetarun: I have done several re-wordings here and settled on the current version, Howzat? StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:09, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- All good. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Dersetarun: I have done several re-wordings here and settled on the current version, Howzat? StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 14:09, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- From the Host ground for touring section: gated first-class matches at the ground continued unabated and included the first visit of the Indians to Oxford. "Indians" is too informal.
- @Desertarun: Whilst still trying to adhere to the nomenclature mentioned below, I have changed the wording to read "the first visit of the Indian tourists to Oxford, as part of their inaugural tour of England in 1911" (with Indian Test status not coming until 1931, they were referred to throughout the tour as "the Indians"). StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 12:31, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Yes, good spot. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Desertarun: Whilst still trying to adhere to the nomenclature mentioned below, I have changed the wording to read "the first visit of the Indian tourists to Oxford, as part of their inaugural tour of England in 1911" (with Indian Test status not coming until 1931, they were referred to throughout the tour as "the Indians"). StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 12:31, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- From the Host ground for touring section: Although the First World War bought an end to first-class cricket between 1914 and 1919. Could it say suspended, halted or similar instead of brought to an end?
- Done. I have reworded this. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 10:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Looks fine now. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Done. I have reworded this. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 10:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- From the Host ground for touring section: The 1950s saw first visits to the ground by both the touring West Indians in 1950, and the touring South Africans in 1955. Prefer formal name for the West Indian and South African national teams.
- @Desertarun: I'm guessing to mean West Indians → West Indies? The typical nomenclature for tour matches is to refer to the team either as "the touring Indians" or, where it's not possible to add "ians" to the name, to call the touring team "Ireland XI". I think formal names are only used when the team is playing another international team on the tour, i.e. in a Test match etc. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 11:09, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Ok, we'll set that one aside. So nothing else to do with this one. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Desertarun: I'm guessing to mean West Indians → West Indies? The typical nomenclature for tour matches is to refer to the team either as "the touring Indians" or, where it's not possible to add "ians" to the name, to call the touring team "Ireland XI". I think formal names are only used when the team is playing another international team on the tour, i.e. in a Test match etc. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 11:09, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Is there anything meaningful to say about the home club side? (Christ Church Cricket Club).
- @Desertarun: Ideally I'd like to reference this, but the Christ Church Cricket Club is akin to some secret society! They don't appear to have a website, and independent coverage (especially recent) seems non-existent. Only scorecards from CricketArchive allude to the fact Christ Church Cricket Club play there! StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 09:26, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- I did think there wasn't going to be much to say, but it would have been nice to include something. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Desertarun: Ideally I'd like to reference this, but the Christ Church Cricket Club is akin to some secret society! They don't appear to have a website, and independent coverage (especially recent) seems non-existent. Only scorecards from CricketArchive allude to the fact Christ Church Cricket Club play there! StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 09:26, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Paragraph three of the Host ground for touring section is quite long and could be split.
- Done. I have now split this. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 10:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- All fine. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Done. I have now split this. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 10:56, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- The pavilion is pictured but nothing seems to be said about it in the text. Any reason for this?
- @Desertarun: I did search high and low for information about the pavilion, but could not find all that much. It looks quite new to my eye, so had a look for articles about it being built, but the only thing I found was on an eletricians website about rewiring it! I will have another look. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 09:26, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- It would be nice to have something to say, but if there isn't anything so be it, that's not a battier to GA status. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Desertarun: I did search high and low for information about the pavilion, but could not find all that much. It looks quite new to my eye, so had a look for articles about it being built, but the only thing I found was on an eletricians website about rewiring it! I will have another look. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 09:26, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Could the section headers be changed? They don't feel intuitive. For example one reads "Host ground for touring sides" and the one after reads "Later use" - but there are touring sides in the later use section too.
- @Desertarun: I have changed the later section heading to read "Venue for one-day cricket" and have moved the first paragraph into the previous section. I'm not entirely happy with the title header, doesn't seem overly imaginative, but does cover the section. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 12:34, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- Looks a lot better. Desertarun (talk) 17:41, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
- @Desertarun: I have changed the later section heading to read "Venue for one-day cricket" and have moved the first paragraph into the previous section. I'm not entirely happy with the title header, doesn't seem overly imaginative, but does cover the section. StickyWicket aka AA (talk) 12:34, 30 July 2023 (UTC)
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