Talk:Chris Wilkinson (architect)/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:26, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 19:57, 18 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Nominator: Ktin (talk · contribs) at 23:34, 3 May 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Prose

Do we know the death location?
Citations are usually not required in the lead, as it repeats the info already present in the article (WP:LEADCITE). Is there any reason for having those two citations in the lead?
"He was known for his" — This arises the question: "According to whom?". If multiple source back up this assertion, something like "He was widely known for ... " might work.
Do we have anything to link to techno-centric design?
Write full "Order of the British Empire" in the lead.
Our article calls "RIBA Stirling Prizes" just "Stirling Prize" (same comment for the prose as well)
Maybe "back to back" should be "for two continuous years". Is that better?
The lead should have a bit more about his career.
"Wilkinson was born" — specify full name on the first mention in the prose
We name his mother, but not his father?
"He graduated with a degree" — Do we know which degree?
"During this period he took" — specify whether 'he' here means Wilkinson or Lasdun.
"joined Norman Foster's firm" — no need to repeat the full name again, just surname would work
Add a comma after 'Michael Hopkins'
"with Richard Rogers's " — no need to repeat the full name again, just surname would work
"on the London Underground's Jubilee line extension." — should be "Jubilee Line Extension" (in title case)
"for Dyson Institute of Engineering and Technology" — missing the definite article
"The English newspaper The Guardian wrote about the work" — Just a optional suggestion: Newspaper's don't write, correspondents do.
"in Rotherham, won the firm a RIBA Stirling Prize." — why comma?
"across the Tyne" — specify 'River'
Add a comma after "blinking bridge"
"the Guangzhou International Finance Center a skyscraper in Guangzhou in China" — should be "the Guangzhou International Finance Center, a skyscraper in Guangzhou, China"
"at University of Exeter" — missing the definite article
"in Kings Cross, London into" — missing MOS:GEOCOMMA
"His publications include Supersheds, an exploration of the history and evolution of large-volume universal spaces" — This was partially previously mentioned.
"working with" — If the source gives liberty, it should be something like "working usually with"
"Wilkinson married his wife Diana (née Edmunds)" — 'his wife' should be removed.
Link supermodel
Avoid one lined paragraphs.
In the section: "Select architectural works", I'd suggest to write the buildings and work names as a bulleted list instead. And use few images, such as Gardens by the Bay, Guangzhou, etc. along with the text in the Career section. Just an optional suggestion.

Images

Caption for the lead image would be helpful, specifying when was it pictured (if known)
NFMR seems fine.
Suggesting to add ALT text.
Rest images seem fine; you're lucky that UK has freedom of panorama!

References

Overall it has a few formatting issues:

Ref 1 is a bare URL
Ref#4: Lowercase title
Ref#7, #18, #19: Has a generic name in the author name parameter. Remove it.
Fix the quote and remove the definite article in Architects' Journal
Why is https://propertylistings.ft.com/propertynews/united-kingdom/5284-gasholder-apartments-recall-london-s-industrial-past.html a WP:RS?
The Google Arts & Culture source is by the Royal Academy of Art.
Ref#13: Chicago Architecture Center should be the website name
Ref#15: 'www.royalacademy.org.uk' should be 'Royal Academy of Art' (I think)
"designboom | architecture & design magazine" — check formatting

Spot check

Ref#3a: OK
Red#3k: OK
Ref#15: OK
Ref#16: OK, text is a bit similar but that appears to be a case of WP:LIMITED
Ref#20: OK

General discussion

Hi! I'll review this article as a part of the June 2022 backlog drive. Feel free to let me know if you have any questions or need clarification for any point. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:56, 18 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 20:57, 18 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for these very detailed notes Kavyansh.Singh. I am running a tad busy in my offline world. Will address these questions when I can sneak-in some time. If I could get some time for these edits, that would be much appreciated. Thanks again. Ktin (talk) 03:35, 21 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

No rush, just a quick nudge, Ktin. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 13:19, 4 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

About a month ... I'm afraid I'd have to fail this. Feel free to renominate after making the changes. - Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:26, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.