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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:54, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
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Great work here. Just some copy tweaks (MOS:INOROUT trips you up a fair bit) and this will be ready. 7-day hold to Dr.Swag Lord, Ph.d. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:09, 10 January 2023 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]in the last couple of decades
I wonder if there's something more durable for the lead.the reality television series, RuPaul's Drag Race
Remove this comma *and* the word "the". The show isn't inessential information that can be placed into an appositive. If I read an article that said "Journal issues have been devoted to David Bowie, Michael Jackson, Keanu Reeves, and the reality television series", I'd ask which one.brought in a network of international media, film, and television scholars together
This is kind of a fluffy line. If it's worth keeping, remove "in".
History
[edit]who in 2006, published a review of recent debates about celebrity
Complete the appositive by adding a comma after "who".In the inaugural issue of the journal, the co-editors note that
"noted", use past tenseSuch a task of "uncovering and analyzing the systems and structures" of celebrity, lies at the
Remove unneeded commathat celebrity studies was "more central to understanding the everyday than maths, English or science."
This happens quite a few times: you're quoting a fragment of a sentence, so quotation mark before period. See MOS:INOROUT.was titled: "Avatar Obama in the Age of Liquid Celebrity."
No need for the colon (also another INOROUT issue).Graeme Turner, Professor of Cultural Studies at the University of Queensland, was featured in the invitation-only first issue of the journal where
Add a comma after "journal"Additionally, Turner issued a challenge to other academics that celebrity studies scholars do more than contribute to the "discursive regime surrounding celebrity," and instead
A comma you don't need. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences (CinS)Holmes and Redmond attribute ... Additionally, the editors believe
I'd use past tense here.
Notable studies
[edit]titled, "And Bringing Up the Rear: Pippa Middleton, Her Derrière and Celebrity."
No need for the title (also another INOROUT issue).McCabe wrote that "The
, maybe wrote, "The?under the headline: "Meghan accused of dropping feminism like a hot potato."
No colon, INOROUTClancy and Yelin criticized the headline as "problematically inaccurate" and Yelin later appeared
You need a comma after "problematically inaccurate", outside the quotes (CinS).
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]Earwig's highest number, a 37.1% to the Guardian article about the Pippa Middleton buttocks study, is mostly a cited quote as well as the title of the work. Indeed, journal article titles tend to skew up the results. I don't have issues.
Nine sources of the 92 were selected for spot checks.
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The volume of celebrity studies scholarship led to Holmes and Redmond (2006) review of recent debates about celebrity, which examined celebrity culture across a wide range of media and contexts. The expansion of celebrity studies continued with the launch of the journal Celebrity Studies in 2010
- 17: Can't access.
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The first was the establishment of an academic journal entitled, simply, Celebrity Studies and dedicated to exploring the ongoing relevance of celebrity to a number of academic disciplines, from literary studies to sociology to political science.
- 24:
Edited by a highbrow panel of 15 editors based at universities in the UK and overseas
Wonder if this might be reworded a bit? I almost thought they had an editorial board of 30. - 48: Shortlisting of journal for ALPSP award.
- 72:
While the body of The Sunday Times article represented our work reasonably well, the title ‘Academics accuse Meghan Markle of dropping feminism like a hot potato’ proved problematically inaccurate
- 76: Can't access.
- 79:
That it is possible to publish national material in an international journal is evidenced by Brent McDonald and Daniel Eagles’ (2012) examination of Australian diver Matthew Mitcham as a gay sporting icon
citing an article titled "Matthew Mitcham: the narrative of a gay sporting icon" - 83: Can't access.
Other items
[edit]- The cover art has a valid NFUR. All of the other items are appropriately licensed. I wonder about the visual value of File:Study on Keanu Reeves.pdf. Images need alt text.
Fixes
[edit]Hi @Sammi Brie: Thank you for taking the time to review this article. I agree with many of your suggestions. I will implement them as soon as I can. Best, Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 23:09, 11 January 2023 (UTC).
Lead
[edit]in the last couple of decades
-- Changed a bitthe reality television series, RuPaul's Drag Race
-- Fixedbrought in a network of international media, film, and television scholars together
-- You're right, I removed this line. Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 23:29, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
History
[edit]who in 2006, published a review of recent debates about celebrity
-- FixedIn the inaugural issue of the journal, the co-editors note that
-- FixedIn the inaugural issue of the journal, the co-editors note that
-- Fixedthat celebrity studies was "more central to understanding the everyday than maths, English or science."
-- Fixedwas titled: "Avatar Obama in the Age of Liquid Celebrity."
--FixedGraeme Turner, Professor of Cultural Studies at the University of Queensland, was featured in the invitation-only first issue of the journal where
--FixedAdditionally, Turner issued a challenge to other academics that celebrity studies scholars do more than contribute to the "discursive regime surrounding celebrity," and instead
--FixedHolmes and Redmond attribute ... Additionally, the editors believe
--Fixed Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 21:57, 12 January 2023 (UTC).
Notable studies
[edit]titled, "And Bringing Up the Rear: Pippa Middleton, Her Derrière and Celebrity."
--FixedMcCabe wrote that "The
--Fixedunder the headline: "Meghan accused of dropping feminism like a hot potato."
--FixedClancy and Yelin criticized the headline as "problematically inaccurate" and Yelin later appeared
--Fixed
Sources
[edit]Edited by a highbrow panel of 15 editors based at universities in the UK and overseas
--Fixed (I think?)
Other items
[edit]- Alt text included for all images.
@Sammi Brie: All done! Dr. Swag Lord (talk) 22:17, 12 January 2023 (UTC)