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Passed. That Tired TarantulaBurrow 01:21, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Krisgabwoosh (talk · contribs) 12:51, 26 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: That Tired Tarantula (talk · contribs) 02:25, 19 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]


I'll go ahead and start responding to these tomorrow. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:12, 24 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, thanks! That Tired TarantulaBurrow 00:06, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Hey @That Tired Tarantula: I was hoping to get this GA tackled this afternoon, but there is a coup d'état currently underway in Bolivia. I was set to depart to the country in three days, so I will now be busy making several calls and getting unexpected affairs in order. I may not be able to meet the one-week deadline. Feel free to close the GA if that happens. Sorry for the inconvenience. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 22:02, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
It's fine; I'll push the deadline back a week. I'm sorry that that situation is happening over there and that you've had to go through it. Please let me know if you need more time later. That Tired TarantulaBurrow 22:23, 26 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@That Tired Tarantula: Coup failed (hurray!). I waited a day to see if there would be any developments that would fill up my schedule (state of emergency, flight cancellations, etc.) but it seems things have died down. Just another Wednesday in Bolivia, ha, ha. I should hopefully (finger crossed) be able to tackle this GA by 30 June. I'll try and do it sooner to give time for responses before I depart but just know I might not be super quick on the uptake once I leave the country. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 04:25, 28 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Phew! That's fine, don't worry. :) That Tired TarantulaBurrow 06:48, 28 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Alright! Time to get this show on the road. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 17:11, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

First look

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Criteria

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  • No maintenance templates: Green tickY
  • Relavent images are present: Green tickY
  • Article is stable; no ongoing edit wars or significant changes recently: Green tickY
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  • No copyright violations/plagiarism: Green tickY
  • Images are free (unless a rationale is given if they are not) and tagged: Green tickY

Prose

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Broadness and focus

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The article is mostly focused, but there are a few times where it goes off-topic. Three sentences in the first paragraph of the early life and career section talk about Carlos Subirana Gianella's family, but not him, and the last paragraph of the article analyzes the shift in his family's political beliefs instead of just his. The first three sentences of the second paragraph in the Chamber of Deputies section don't mention Subirana and the last sentences of first paragraph of the tenure section comment on the number of younger members of legislature in general. As a result, Subirana's family should just be mentioned in the early life and career section and details about politics should be kept to a minimum; they should only be elaborated on when the reader wouldn't understand what happened in certain points of Subirana's life otherwise. Here are my suggestions:

Current text Change to:
"Carlos Subirana was born on 18 August 1986 in Santa Cruz de la Sierra to businessman Carlos Subirana Suárez and his wife, Ana María Gianella Peredo. The Subirana family are a wealthy, well-established clan in Santa Cruz with a penchant for public service. His father worked as an executive in the financial services sector and served as minister of justice in the administration of Hugo Banzer; his uncle, Wálter, was minister of labor in the second cabinet of Gonzalo Sánchez de Lozada." "Carlos Subirana was born on 18 August 1986 in Santa Cruz de la Sierra to businessman Carlos Subirana Suárez, a member of the Subirana family, and his wife, Ana María Gianella Pedro."
"In an abrupt about-face, Subirana flipped his support to the MAS in the 2014 election. The reversal came as his father had been nominated to contest a seat in parliament on behalf of the ruling party. The apparent shift in disposition was not entirely without precedent: the Subirana family had long been open about its alignment toward the political left. Yet still, both Subiranas had until then been open critics of government policy – the elder through his newspaper and the younger as an opposition lawmaker. In any case, the family's political realignment left Subirana on the electoral margins, and he was not nominated for a second term." "Subirana aligned with the MAS in the 2014 election because his father was nominated to contest a seat in parliament on behalf of the ruling party; until then, Carlos Subirana Gianella was a critic of government policy. The realignment caused him to not be nominated for a second term."
"Subirana was sworn in on 19 January 2010; at 23, he was the youngest voting member of the chamber and is one of the youngest persons ever elected to parliament. A significant aspect of the 2010–2015 legislature was its youthful roster of members; the youngest lawmakers in the freshman class were the first to be elected under the auspices of the 2009 Constitution, which lowered the age threshold to hold office from 25 to 18 years." "Subirana was sworn in on 19 January 2010; at 23, he was the youngest voting member of the chamber and one of the youngest people ever elected to parliament. He was elected under the 2009 Constituion, which lowered the mimimum age for holding office from 25 to 18 years."
"The MNR maintained a protracted downward trajectory into the 2009 election season. Eminently aware of its diminished electoral presence, the party's presidential candidate, Germán Antelo, withdrew to back National Convergence (CN), the big tent alliance of Manfred Reyes Villa. For his support, CN granted Antelo broad discretion over its slate of candidates in Santa Cruz. Subirana, still in law school then, was among the few MNR members Antelo selected as part of his pick of postulants." "When he was in law school, Subirana was selected by Germán Antelo to become a candidate in Santa Cruz."

Of course, the wording doesn't have to be exactly the same as this; please do whatever you think is best as long as the article stays on topic.

I'll leave my responses here since I can't really fit them in the table. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 17:11, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • The only point I'm only going to have to disagree with is the first one. It's actually pretty common for biographies of people in political families to devote some level of detail about their relatives' political positions. The articles on John F. Kennedy and Benjamin Harrison come to mind. I think the difference is that there's usually more biographical information about the article subject's early life, which makes the family information comparatively smaller. In this case, there just isn't as much.
  • Agreed; it's too long and goes into too much detail. I've tried to shorten it to only state that his father had joined the party and that he was already on the political left. I left the side note by Romero because I thought it could still give some insight; it's not essential, though, so tell me if I should just remove it.
  • Agreed; shortened.
  • Agreed. I didn't shorten it as much as you suggested, as I thought it was important to explain who Germán Antelo (the man picking him) was and why Subirana was suddenly joining a different party.

When it comes to the article's broadness, it seems like the section about Subirana's legal and media career is lacking information, since I found several sources about it and specific events in his career online. I also found information about a controversy involving Subirana at the end of his political career, but I haven't looked into it very much yet. The other sections look good. Overall, it covers most of the information about the subject, but there is also some stuff that would be helpful if it were added.

The section on his media and legal career is short, as I couldn't find much information. I'd be happy to add anything new you may have found. Feel free to tell me about the controversy as well. I might have also come across it but not added it; scandals and cases of corruption are quite common in Bolivia, so I'm hesitant to add things unless they result in a conviction. Lest every article be an exhaustive list of controversies and criminal proceedings that go nowhere. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 17:11, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'm pretty sure there wasn't a conviction, so nevermind. I found some information about Subirana having represented a flight attendant who was in a plane accident, but I didn't find much about it, so it's not really important. Anyways, this was really just a suggestion and not something that I'm reviewing the article for, since it looks pretty broad in its coverage already. That Tired TarantulaBurrow 23:30, 5 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Writing and MoS

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The writing is pretty good overall, but there are a couple minor errors; if the GA passes, I'll edit the prose a bit to fix them. I don't see any problems as far as MoS goes.

Neutrality

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I am not concerned about due weight in this article; it seems like viewpoints are being adequately presented. But I am concerned about editorialism, since I'm noticing a lot of words to watch. But this is a shorter article, so it can be fixed in a couple quick edits.

Sources

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Evaluating sources

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  • The MOS states that LinkedIn can be used for "uncontroversial self-description". I only used it for the claim that he practiced law at his family's firm, which I think isn't controversial. Obviously, an independent source is preferable, but I couldn't find one. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 17:11, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
  • All the sources in the publication section check out.
  • The first source in the book and encyclopedia section appears to be self-published, so it should not be used. The other sources are good.

Citation accuracy

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There are a few pieces of information that I can't see mentioned in the sources:

1. It doesn't say that Ana María Gianella Peredo was Carlos Subirana Suárez's wife, but the writing corresponds with what the source says for everything else.

2. Where does it talk about his uncle?

3. Self-published; not reliable

4. None of the three sources mention when he graduated.

6. Doesn't say that the firm was his father's or that he was a paralegal

7. From his LinkedIn profile; unreliable

13. Where does it mention neoliberalism?

Okay, it's fine. That Tired TarantulaBurrow 18:40, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

20. It doesn't mention when Rodolfo Avilés was sworn in.

22. Using the self-written source is fine here.

23. The source mentions how other members of his party questioned him about supporting MAS, but doesn't make any statements about him supporting the MAS more in general.

  • Alrighty, now there's only a couple more days in the GAR; have you found any more sources so far? If not, it might be best to just reword the sentence so that it says that members of his party asked him about his support. That Tired TarantulaBurrow 17:17, 7 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

24. It might be good to mention the incident that the source talks about as well.

  • For the sake of summary style, I think going into him attending the inauguration of the prosecutor general and explaining the context around why that was controversial would veer off from the article's focus. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 17:11, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

25. Looks good, but the self-published source should be removed

29. Self-published, but fine since it presents the Subirana's viewpoint on his family's political beliefs

37. It only mentions 2014.

  • I removed some citations so the number may have changed. Anyway, the book was published in 2014 but Pg. 307 states that the commissions are for the 2014–2015 legislative term. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 18:14, 30 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

All of the other citations and the ref layout look good.

Overall

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There are some issues, but they're minor and can be fixed pretty easily; the article looks good overall. I'm placing the GA review on hold for two weeks (extending for a week due to the coup in Bolivia). In order for the GA to pass, the article will have to stay on-topic (see the spots I mentioned in the broadness and focus section), have the sources published by the subject removed (except for the exceptions I mentioned), provide sources for/remove any unsourced information, and words to watch will have to be removed, unless they're necessary for explaining things. As far as broadness goes, what I've commented earlier is just a suggestion; the article is broad overall. It won't be a factor in my final decision for the review.

Update: Now it's been two weeks and the article has reached GA standard. Great work! That Tired TarantulaBurrow 01:21, 9 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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