Talk:Carlisle & Finch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:20, 24 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Two sentences for lead feels short, I would aim for a sentence or so from every section in the article.
File:Carlisle & Finch logo.png has two n.a. in the fair use justification which is inadequate.
"at 182-184 Elm" en-dash.
"included ... including" repetitive.
"on April 17, 1897 with" comma after year.
"In that year, they" -> "That year" or "The same year"...
"After World War II, Brent" no need to link the war in this article.
"As of 2020," 2021 now, is this still valid?
"5-1/2 inches tall and ran on metal track with rails two inches" convert to metric, also be consistent with either words or numerals.
"factory in Plymouth, Connecticut in" comma after state.
"The locomotive included" link locomotive on first usage.
"of The Children’s Museum of Indianapolis." replace the curly apostrophe for a straight one.
"When World War I started" no need to link the war.
"with additional large orders Greece, Spain" from?
"manually activated screw " hyphenate manually-activated.
"lifetime of about 7 hours" seven.
"Xenon arc searchlights were introduced in the 1960s.[16] LED models became available in 2019.[17]" make it clear that C&F did this, not that the technology was generally available.
"fresnel lenses." aren't Fresnel capitalised?
"in landfall lights" what's that?
"Information plates.." no full stop required in this caption.
"Gasoline powered dynamo, 1912." ditto.
"from the open sea." [1] format that as a proper reference.
Avoid SHOUTING in reference titles.
Consistent date formats in refs.
"1894 establishments in Ohio" etc, the article says it's not clear if it was 1893 or 1894, so this (and other such categories) should be 1890s and not this specific year.

That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:44, 25 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the quick review. I've fixed everything except for "in landfall lights" what's that?. There's a footnote explaining what a landfall light it. Is that not sufficient? -- RoySmith (talk) 00:05, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Ugh, apparently putting a reference in a reference blows up. I'm not sure how to fix that. -- RoySmith (talk) 00:07, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Worked around that. -- RoySmith (talk) 00:11, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cool, nice updates, content with the article and satisfied that it meets the GA criteria. Passing now. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 10:09, 26 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]