Talk:Bully (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hahnchen (talk · contribs) 18:35, 17 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Fail

The lead does not summarise the subject.
The article is not broad or focused enough -
- Very little reception.
- Very little development.
Could do with a screenshot to demonstrate the gameplay and graphics.
Reconsider the plot section. Right now, the plot is split into various sections, some of which overlap. It would be better to have plot told in chronological prose rather than in random bits in character biographies.
Sections are unbalanced, it needs an editor in a traditional sense to give the correct weighting to the sections. Why is there a one line "Sexuality" section for example? The Controversy section would work better if it were not split up into geographies, and instead presented a narrative for the reader through the themes.
There is no consistency to the article. The reception section for the original game has no connection to the reception section of the Scholarship edition. The reviews box is used in the original reception, so why not in the latter section?
Sourcing is an issue throughout the article. Whereas it could be understood that the game is the primary source for the plot and gameplay, the development section is blank. The reception section also opens up with a list of reviews, some of which may not be from reliable sources, and even if they are, may not be the best ones to use.

In conclusion - the article needs an editor. It needs an authorial voice to go through the article and to ensure its consistency and comprehensiveness. Right now, it reads like disjointed elements with no real connection to the rest of the content. This needs significant work before being Good Article material. - hahnch e n 18:35, 17 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]