Talk:Buenos Aires/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MBelgrano (talk) 17:54, 20 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Some things I have noticed so far

I have summoned Wildbot, and it pointed links to disambiguation pages (see the template at the top of the talk page). They must be fixed, to point to the right article.
The number of references is appropiate for a standard article (it does not need to be tagged), but a good or featured article needs more than this. All sections, nd if possible all paragraphs, should be referenced.
There are far too many images. Images in general should be distributed as described at MOS:IMAGES, and galleries have their own policy. Even more, galleries shouldn't be created with the code used but with "gallery" parameters (in the edit mode, press "insert a picture gallery"above the editing box, and it will provide a basic layout of this). That will allow to have simpler code and ease of editing.
Paragraphs should not be one or two sentences long. Expand the, or merge them with the other ones. Sections of one or two short paragraphs, like "Climate" or "Districts" must be expanded or merged into others (tables and images do not count).
Comments inside brackets should be reformulated whenever possible, incorporating them into the sentence or developed at a sentence of their own. Translation comments are acceptable uses of brackets, but "A second (and permanent) settlement was established..." can be easily avoided.
There's no mention to the creation of the Viceroyalty of the Río de la Plata. Changing from being a remote and all-forgotten village of the Viceroyalty of Peru, into being the capital of a new viceroyalty is definitely worth mentioning.
The XIX century civil war is completely underestimated. The mixed reactions to the Primera Junta, the later governments that ruled from Buenos Aires, the battle of Cepeda that ended the existence of a central government, the anarchy, the failed attempt of Rivadavia to rule the country under an unitarian constitution, the long government of Rosas, Caseros and the 1853 Constitution, etc. It's not needed to tell it all, that's national history rather than that of Buenos Aires, but with all this being basically a war between Buenos Aires and the inner cities, it's needed to explain more.
"from 1820 to 1880, Buenos Aires was almost a nation in itself" is not accurate. Such a thing was from 1852 to 1862. Before that, it was just another province of a Federation, albeit by far the most powerful one. If that image stays, the caption should be reformulated.
Informal usage of the word "myth" (meaning, for something else than elves, trolls or rings of power) is discouraged at Wikipedia:Words to avoid. The 1945 demonstration is a well-remembered one, perhaps a turning point in local politics, but the word "myth" is too big.
"The silent marches of their mothers (Mothers of the Plaza de Mayo) are a well-known image of Argentines suffering during those times" is not the best way to give an example. It should be reformulated
The plans to make freeways should be referenced, and the effects atributed to a source: that freeways are "obstrusive" or that theyr spoiled neighbourhoods are analysis that can't be formulated from the "narrative voice".
What about the failed projects of Alfonsín to move the capital somewhere else?
The part that mentions that the Capital does not have a police of it's own should mention the ongoing conflict between mayors and presidents about giving one or not.
The mention that the Teatro Colón "is closed for renovations until at least 2010" is outdated. Yes, it's still closed, but the reopen is scheduled for the next May 24.
"Notable residents" does not say anything and should be simply removed. "List of Argentines" is not useful here, as it does not list people from Buenos Aires but from anywhere in Argentina.
"Education" does not need to be splitted into sub sections. A general one would be enough.
Neighbourhoods have 2 sections for the same?
The "Tourism" section reads like a tourist advertisment. It should be re-written. Those open lists should be reformulated into plain text.
The "Transportation" section should mention the "web" grid in the national levels, with most transport ways being from and to Buenos Aires, with little conections between the other regions.
It must be mentioned that Ezeiza serves Buenos aires, but isn't located within Buenos Aires itself. MBelgrano (talk) 17:54, 20 March 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This nominaton has been on hold for 2 weeks, there has been some improvement, but it's very little, so I will have to fail the article. I must made an amendment to my review: it's not mandatory to use the "gallery" tags, that's a style that may be used as other choices. I think "gallery" is better, but it's just my personal view, and wouldn't fail the article because of it. However, the part that galleries must follow the policies and guidelines listed still stands, as it's independent from which technical system is actually used to generate the gallery MBelgrano (talk) 01:28, 3 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]