Talk:Bronisław Malinowski/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 14:02, 12 January 2023 (UTC)

Comments

This is a clear, readable, and informative article on a major figure. It is well-structured and fully-cited. As such, I'll have few comments to make and even those will basically just be suggestions.

• On the citation style, I note that inline refs to books are inconsistently formatted. Some such as [64] have the page numbers inside the citation; others such as [61] use the "rp" method, with the page numbers in the main text. An alternative would be to list books used for multiple refs in "Sources" and to use a template such as {{sfn}} to keep the page numbers within the refs.
  • I tried to be consistent with the rp method. For [64], it's an academic article, and it lists the article's page range within the journal, which is what we do with cite journal template, instead of using rp (which I use for books). --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
    • Ghastly but within the rules.

• Not sure that describing Jomo Kenyatta as a "prominent social scientist" quite meets the case. There's a stray comma at the end of the list of people, by the way.
  • I've removed "prominent" per WP:PEACOCK. They are notable (having blue links). Some are arguably more prominent than others... no need to stress that, blue-linking should suffice. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

• The acronym "LSE" is introduced but used only a few times. Perhaps it'd be better to spell it out as not everyone will be familiar with it.
  • I've decided to explain it once again the first time the full name is used in the text (outside the lead), and converted all other uses to LSE for consistency. I think it's a good compromise. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

• "The ethnographic collection of artifacts from his expeditions is mostly held by the British Museum and the Melbourne Museum." Why don't we have one or two photos of these artifacts to illustrate the article? They'd plainly be relevant and of interest. Clearly this may be beyond the GA criteria, which is not to say it wouldn't be desirable. On Commons I see File:Malinowski mwali plate xvi.png this and perhaps File:The Sexual Life of Savages in North-Western Melanesia - Plate 7.jpg this and File:The Sexual Life of Savages in North-Western Melanesia - Fig. 3.png this, and there are interesting photos like File:The sexual life of savages in North-Western Melanesia 1929 (37544458).jpg this too. Seems a pity not to include some.
  • I've converted the mentions above in your post (I hope you don't mind, it made it also easy for me to click through to them) to the code with link - in case you didn't know, adding colon : before the File solves the issue of force-displaying a picture. I've also added some images, good idea! I do note we have many other good pictures but they are not cropped, and I am not good at photo editing. Hopefully in years to come someone will crop the images and add some more good stuff here. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
    • It all looks much improved, hope you are pleased with the result.

• Given that all the 'Selected publications' start with the same author, it might be nice to use |author-mask=————— or something of the sort to format the list.
  • I am afraid I don't understand how to use this code, could you demonstrate or carry out that idea? --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
    • Done.

• What is the Kula ring? Needs some sort of gloss at first mention.
  • Ah, good point. I've added explanation to the first mention in the body (not the lead). --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

• "Malinowski is often considered one of anthropology's most skilled ethnographers, especially because of his highly methodical and well-theorised approach to the study of social systems. He is often referred to as"... perhaps cut an "often".

• "village, and endeavour which became" -> "an endeavour..."
  • Done and done for the often above. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

Summary

There's really very little wrong with this article, and I look forward to seeing it listed at GA very soon. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:09, 12 January 2023 (UTC)

• Thank you for the review. I still have some more encyclopedic biographies of his to go through, although I don't expect any major changes. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 06:58, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
  • • Super. It's a GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 09:16, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

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