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Reviewer: Eastfarthingan (talk) · Eastfarthingan (talk) 16:39, 6 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Eastfarthingan, I notice this is your first GA review. Thanks for volunteering to help with the backlog. I'm an experienced GA reviewer so feel free to ask me any questions you might have. (t · c) buidhe 04:23, 7 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Hello (t · c) buidhe The article has been combed and nitpicked and I'm satisfied with the resulting actions taken by Hawkeye & by myself - would you be happy for me to pass this nomination? Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:05, 20 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Fantastic article to be reviewed over the week. Eastfarthingan (talk) 16:39, 6 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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  • Any chance of coming up with a short conclusion in the lead with regards to an assessment on British logistics in this period?
    checkY Sure. Added one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:27, 10 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the background I've noticed that a flow of sentences need to be equal to each other. Some sentences are too short The bulk of the German forces were drawn towards the British sector While this sentence needs a couple of breaks. When the American Operation Cobra, launched on 25 July, succeeded in breaking through the German defences, six additional transport companies were shipped from the United Kingdom although there was already more than sufficient transport resources in the lodgement area in order to support a rapid advance, and plans were drawn up to establish an advanced base in the Le Havre area on the assumption that if the Germans were forced back from the Seine, they would try to establish a new front along the Somme
    checkY Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 03:27, 10 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure this sentence is relevant or if it is could it be expanded? To soften the blow to the British public, the Prime Minister of the United Kingdom, Winston Churchill, announced Montgomery's promotion to field marshal on the same date. What blow would that have been?
    It is just there simply to state Montgomery's rank. Some clever re-wording could remove it. I lifted the text from another article. As to the blow, that could be expanded into an entire article in its own right, but in a nutshell: Britain had been at war longer, had a self-image of being a great power although the reality was fading fast, and had a political need to adopt a high profile to ensure a say in the post-war world order. The British public had been through a lot with rationing and the blitz and all, read newspapers that touted the exploits of their troops and commanders, and regarded Montgomery as a national hero and a military messiah. This had operational and logistical implications, with the British Army occupying the seaborne flank. Partly this was the traditional British preoccupation with the sea, but it meant that the 21st Army Group had more experienced logistics staffs, and much easier logistics because it was advancing towards the ports. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:40, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    checkY Re-worded to remove this. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:27, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • On 16 September, eight American truck companies began running between Bayeux and Brussels to build up stocks for two American airborne divisions. Is this the Red Ball express or something separate to it?
    No, it is the so-called Red Lion express. It delivered supplies for the US airborne divisions. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 05:40, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Ok would it be better to place that term in the sentence/paragragh? Eastfarthingan (talk) 14:17, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    checkY Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:27, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the Ports section - I think there should be wikilinks to the capture of the ports of Dieppe, Le Havre, Bolougne, Calais - they all have operational names too. eg Operation Undergo.
    checkY This is why I don't like articles named after codenames; thet are dreadfully obscure. Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:27, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The repairs done in Calais, Boulogne, Le Havre etc - were these done by the Canadians, British or French. There is the mention of the Royal Engineers in regard to Ostend. Eastfarthingan (talk) 15:06, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    checkY The Royal Navy did the work offshore, and the Royal Engineers onshore. Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:27, 12 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • The port of Antwerp was opened to coasters that day and to and deep-draught shipping on 28 November. Looks like the sentence is missing a few words?
    checkY Deleted "and". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Scheldt Dredging Control organisation was established & Some 1,031,000 cubic yards (788,000 m3) was dredged - I take it this is a Royal Navy unit & not 21st army group?
    checkY A British Army unit. Inland Water Transport (IWT) was the responsibility of the Royal Engineers. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • military labour had to be brought in. Was this from 21st army group itself?
    It was shared between the US COMZ and 21st Army Group. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Antwerp repeatedly failed to meet its tonnage targets. was this because of the V-weapon attacks or some other cause?
    checkY Partly, but the main problem was difficulty clearing the tonnage received. Added: "
  • and mines laid by sank 67,626 deadweight tons (68,711 deadweight tonnes) more. - a missing word here?
    checkY Added "them". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • 222 3-ton (3.4 m3) lorries, 12 10-ton (11 m3) lorries and 36 tippers. Can any of these types of lorries be named eg Bedford, Chevrolet?
    Sources don't say. Different units were likely to have different types. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • They were drawn from the Anti-Aircraft Command and command mixed transport units. Duplicate word?
    Can't see one. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Five arrived by 26 September. Five came pre-loaded with petrol, five with supplies, and two came empty. Are these companies?
    checkY Yes. Added "companies". Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Road and railway traffic began more routine during October, Missing word?
    checkY Changed "began" to "became" Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • How many locomotives did the British ship over? I've just added another type that was used.
    Not sure. The thousand locomotives were delivered, but deliveries continued through 1945. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • 21st Army Group had made little use of resupply by air during the Normandy campaign, with the exception of the Polish 1st Armoured Division in August. Perhaps could expand a little on this? Would be interesting to see why this formation utilised air transport more than any other in 21st AG.
    Got themselves cut off during Operation Totalize, but the whole thing is outside the scope of the article. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Second paragraph of Air section; were the RAF conducting all the flights?
    Yes. Provision was made for the USAAF to fly in supplies for the 82nd and 101st Airborne Divisions, but this was not required. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sorry to be picky - when starting another sub heading would you be happy to give full names of abbreviations again eg FMC, POL, DID in the 1st few paragraphs where relevant?
    MOS:1STABBR: Write out both the full version and the abbreviation at first occurrence. I can use the {{abbr}} to create a mouse-over. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:50, 13 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • 'The working pipelines failed on 3 October' was this because of the storm?
    No. One failed due to be punctured by a rock outcropping, and the other due to a faulty coupling. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:19, 15 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • and the 21st Army Group Best to remove 'the'.
    Following the sources, "the" is always used except when in an adjectival form. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:19, 15 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ok acknowledged.
  • and foods impregnated with garlic, Perhaps reword this?
    What's the problem here? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:18, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Impregnated.
    checkY Linked to Wiktionary. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:29, 17 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • During the advance in September and October, the two armies.. These being 1st Canadian & 2nd British?
    checkY Yes. Changed to say this. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:18, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • and four of the forestry companies had to be used as infantry just a comment here- this sounds incredible. Would love more detail but perhaps in another article.
    Nos. 1, 9, 14, 25 and 27 Canadian Forestry Companies had been operating sawmills south-east of Names, in the St. Hubert area, and No. 16 Canadian Forestry Company at Spa, south-east of Liege, as part of the Canadian 7th Forestry District. (The four companies of the Canadian 8th Forestry District operated under the 21st Army Group.) They became caught up in the German offensive and held part of the front for a time. They were withdrawn to Brussels and had to abandon 21 sawmills. By the end of the year the ten companies had produced 8,949,659 board feet (21,118.84 m3) of sawn timber. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:18, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. That is fascinating! That is definitely something for Mark Felton productions to make a video about. Eastfarthingan (talk) 21:23, 16 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Double-check by Buidhe

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  • Eastfarthingan, I think you did a great job reviewing this article and giving feedback to improve it. However, there are some aspects of the GA criteria that aren't mentioned in this review. For example, I don't see any mention of evaluating either text or media for copyright issues. I would try to mention each aspect of the criteria in your review; one easy way to avoid missing any of them is using one of the GAN templates. I can also help with any of the more technical aspects (image copyright can be tricky, although Hawkeye is usually very good at using free images). (t · c) buidhe 20:07, 20 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Thank you for your advise Buidhe, I will list those from the templates soon. Eastfarthingan (talk) 20:19, 20 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    All the images are appropriately licensed. All the photographs were taken by British military photographers, hence Crown Copyright, which expired after 50 years. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 22:18, 20 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Assessment

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    Pass or Fail:
    Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:23, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Now you need to follow the instructions on how to pass an article. (WP:GAN/I#PASS) Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:50, 21 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Eastfarthingan (talk) 13:11, 22 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]