Talk:Boy-Scoutz 'n the Hood/GA1

GA Review

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And away we go...

Intro:

• It's pretty obvious what the "Junior Campers" are, but on first reference can you mention that they a Boy Scouts-style organization (similar to how you do it in the Plot section later)?
• "...and eventually goes camping on a father-son outing." This also might be obvious, but can you mention that he goes on this outing with Homer?

Plot:

• The reference to Ernest Borgnine comes out of nowhere here. Can you mention in the plot when and how he first encounters Borgnine, rather than just dropping him in as an aside?
• "Borgnine cannot fight it so they flee to an abandoned summer camp." This too reads strangely. Can you rephrase it to something like "Borgnine tries to fight it, but..." or something like that?
• "At the camp, they are attacked by an unknown figure lurking in the woods." Can you reword this to clarify exactly who the figure was or what this means?

The episode ends before we get to see what the figure is, so I can't explain it any better than this.

--Hunter Kahn (talk) 03:05, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! I have made some changes now so please take another look and let me know what you think. :) TheLeftorium 11:33, 1 March 2009 (UTC)

A good article is:

1. Well-written: Prose is fin, MOS is fine.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable: Sources are fine, no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage: Addresses main topics, no unneeded detail.
4. Neutral: Yes.
5. Stable: Yes.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by images: Yes.

Pass. --Hunter Kahn (talk) 01:17, 3 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks again! TheLeftorium 14:33, 3 March 2009 (UTC)