Talk:Bored (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:11, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Might start this tonight if I have the time, or else the review will begin tomorrow --K. Peake 17:11, 27 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox looks good
"from the soundtrack 13 Reasons Why (A Netflix Original Series Soundtrack)." → "from the soundtrack album, 13 Reasons Why (A Netflix Original Series Soundtrack) (2017)."
Writing sentence should be the second of the para instead and follow it with production still
"The song was released by" → "It was released by"
Wikilink lead single
"Musically a mid-tempo" → "A mid-tempo" with the target
"the lyrics see Eilish" → "the song's lyrics see Eilish"
"received generally mixed reviews" → "has received generally mixed reviews"
"with many deeming it" → "with a number of them deeming it"
"The song has since been" → "The song has been"
"and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV)." → "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV), respectively."
"An accompanying music video for "Bored" was" → "An accompanying music video was"
"In it, It shows Eilish dressed" → "In it, Eilish is shown dressed"
Target Nikes to Nike, Inc.
"hanging off a ladder that goes on" → "while hanging off a ladder that seemingly goes on"
Add a sentence about the video's critical reception
"promoted the song by" → "promoted "Bored" by"
"it during her" → "it for her"

Writing/production sentences should begin this section instead
"as the lead single for the album" → "as the lead single from" with the wikilink and remove target on the soundtrack
Where is digital download and streaming backed up; Tidal is only streaming? Either find a source that states this or add various citations for the release.
"by Billie Eilish, her brother" → "by Eilish alongside her brother"
"for 13 Reasons Why, and" → "for 13 Reasons Why and"
"as it opened her music" → "due to opening her music"
Target key to Key (music)
Wikilink tempo
Are you sure the stylization is correct for the range that Eilish's vocals span?
Identify music critics as music journalists here instead to prevent repetitive wording, though keep the target
"that makes Eilish feel contempt for an ex-boyfriend" → "that demonstrates Eilish feeling contempt for an ex-lover"

Can you get more than three reviews since at least four are needed to give a critical overview?
"has received mainly mixed reviews" → "has been met with mainly mixed reviews"
"saying it was" → "opining that it is"
"Writing for Insider, Courteney Larocca" → "For Insider, Courteney Larocca"
"the layering in Eilish's vocals" → "the layering of Eilish's vocals"
""Bored" has been" → "Commercially, "Bored" was" because this is a new para
"and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV)." → "and Polish Society of the Phonographic Industry (ZPAV), respectively."

"climbs up an endless latter." → "climbing up an endless latter in the music video." on the img text
Wikilink music video
"was released on Eilish's Youtube on" → "was released to Eilish's YouTube on" with the wikilink
"with the concept." → "with the concept for it."
"sees her climb and hang off" → "sees her climbing and hanging off"
"dressed in a blue track suit" → "while she is dressed in a blue tracksuit"
Target Nikes to Nike, Inc.
"then talked about the videos" → "also talked about the visual's
Target antigravity to Anti-gravity

"received positive reviews from critics." → "was met with positive reviews from critics."
"praised the visual, saying" → "praised the visual, saying:"
"And that she" → "She continued, commenting that Eilish"
"Writing for Idolator, Mike Wass described" → "For Idolator, Mike Wass described"
"described the music video as" → "labeled the music video as"

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

On hold once the issues are fixed, though reach out if you are confused about any of the changes I requested to implement. --K. Peake 09:25, 28 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks a lot for another review Kyle! I have address all of your requests! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 01:09, 29 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass after a very nice job on the response from you, with me only having copyedited one word! --K. Peake 08:13, 29 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]