Talk:Bobby Bauer/GA1

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Reviewer: Secret (talk · contribs) 20:25, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

One of five GA reviews I will do this weekend, (if not done by Sunday feel free to delete it and find a new GA reviewer). Thanks Secret ^account 20:25, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing..... great article, doesn't need much work.

"He was a member of the famed "Kraut Line" with teammates Milt Schmidt and Woody Dumart that led the Bruins to two Stanley Cup championships and which became the first line to finish first, second and third in NHL scoring, in 1939–40." Seems too much for one sentence, split?

Done.

"as the league's most gentlemanly player" better to give the whole meaning "player adjudged to have exhibited the best type of sportsmanship and gentlemanly conduct combined with a high standard of playing ability", instead of vague wording like "gentlemanly player" if that's a phase.

Reworded, tried not to closely paraphrase the award's definition. What do you think?

"Returning to Kitchener, Bauer joined his family's hockey equipment business." Who founded the business, was it his father, hockey playing brother, or another relative? The article on the business isn't clear on that, nor anything was mentioned on early life.

Father in law, actually. Updated with a source. Reso lute 02:31, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

How can some "regained" their amateur status, clarify.

Long version: A leftover from Victorian-era thinking where sport was meant to be played for the game, not a paycheque. Consequently, Amateur associations tend to frown on professionalism. In order to play senior hockey, Bauer had to regain his amateur status, but I don't know what was involved at that point (he regained it during the war to play for those military teams by virtue of being an active serving member). Our Prime Minister, Stephen Harper, actually just released a rather interesting book that delved into the early conflicts between amateur and professional hockey.
Short version: I simply removed the statement that he regained his status. It's unnecessary for this article.

Wikilink OHA

Done.

"Bobby assisted his brother's efforts in creating the team," Any extra details on how he assisted in the creation of the team, as that seems like a significant accomplishment.

Found a snippet and added it in.

Ain't images published in Canada before 1949 in Public Domain per Template:PD-Canada? Can a free image be added to the article? If not a fair use looks ok as the subject was deceased for 50 years.

Yes, but for practical purposes, the URAA date is Jan 1, 1946. Since his career was primarily in Boston, I can't assume a picture of him in a Bruins uniform was never published in the US, thus the 1923 date is what matters. I can grab a fair use image, however.

Sources follow the content, no close paraphrasing noticed.

On hold for now. Secret ^account 02:25, 14 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Appreciate the review. I've addressed the simple ones, but am going to have to dig a bit to see if there is a discussion of what he did to help his brother's efforts with the national team. Thanks, Reso lute 02:31, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

And found a bit to cover that as well. Reso lute 03:23, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ok looks good. Passing Secret ^account 04:46, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, thanks! Reso lute 05:16, 15 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]