Talk:Black and Blue (Better Call Saul)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 07:07, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
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Some of the same issues as other episodes and some light copyediting but almost there. Again, pinging @A person in Georgia and FishandChipper:. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:07, 18 November 2022 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]- about 80% of the boxing sequence should be "80 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
- Bernstein had been concerned that Odenkirk's training from his action film Nobody would impact his performance but Odenkirk was able to hold back. you want a comma after performance here, as "Odenkirk was able to hold back" is indeed a sentence of its own.
- Albuquerque's former world champion boxer Johnny Tapia the possessive here strikes me as odd
- "doing what every character in 'Black and Blue' is being forced to do: confront their own worst tendencies head-on." another case of MOS:INOROUT fixing
Sourcing and spot checks
[edit]Earwig checks out, though I wonder if there's just a tad too much of Greene. I won't ding you for it.
- 3: Used five times, but checks out each time.
- 6: I can't check this one out... Is there a timestamp for that video?
- 10: Quotes are reproduced faithfully.
- 15: Emmy nomination.
Other items
[edit]- No image issues.
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