Talk:Black Magic (Little Mix song)/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be taking a look at this! — Ghost River 16:38, 23 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

Link "girl group"
"released on 21 May 2015 through Syco Music"
"album, Get Weird (2015)."
"received ~~critical~~ acclaim from music critics"
"becoming the group's first single to reach number one there" → "the first Little Mix single to do so"
"The song remained at number one for three" → "It remained there for three"
Comma after "Outside of the United Kingdom"
"sixteen additional countries" → "16 additional countries" per MOS:NUMERAL
- Y Done for this section. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Background and release

Link first instance of Little Mix in the body
"The group said that the new album is "stronger" and will be about relationships and that is also better than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013)." → "The group said that the new album would be "stronger" and "better" than their two previous albums, DNA (2012) and Salute (2013), and would be about relationships."
Link lead single
"a "whole new sound" compared to previous material."
"they've done" → "they have done" per MOS:CONTRACT
"They also said that their album was delayed due to the fact that they wrote a whole album but scrapped it, because" → "Album delays were attributed to the fact that Little Mix's original output was scrapped because"
"by tweeting" → "when she tweeted"
"the song's title to be" → "that the song was titled"
Link "leaked" to Internet leak
Last sentence needs a citation
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 06:58, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

No comma after "teen-pop song"
"(add.)" doesn't need to be included in this section
"said, ~~that it is "Basically that~~"we are...""
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:01, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

"Upon its release"
Link "music critics" to Music journalism
Hyphen in "'80s-influenced"
"incredible catchy" should either be "incredibly" or have [sic] written after "incredible", depending on what the source says
Don't need (2012) after DNA since it was introduced earlier
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:04, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Chart performance

"On the UK Singles Chart, the song entered at number one," → ""Black Magic" entered at number one on the UK Singles Chart"
Link "streams" to streaming media
Per MOS:EASTEREGG, link all of "European digital downloads" and not just "European"
Last sentence needs a citation
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:16, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Background and synopsis

"the group posted" → "Little Mix posted"
"said to an interview" → "said in an interview"
The whole second paragraph can and should be condensed into only a few sentences; specific allusions to certain witchy media should also be included here
- Y Done for this section. I tried trimming the second paragraph and removed some unnecessary sentences to the best extent that I can. I also changed some tenses to past tense.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:28, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

"references of" → "references to"
"spellbinding" in quotes
"However, the music video also received some negative reviews." → "The acclaim for the music video was not universal."
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:31, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances

Comma after "Black Magic Radio Tour"
Comma after Total Access
"among singers" → "alongside singers"
- Y Done for this section.ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:32, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Cover versions

Per WP:USEPROSE, this shouldn't necessarily be a bulletpoint list. I'd also like more detail on each one, particularly regarding release dates of these performances.
The Holly Kenyon one needs a citation
- (talk page stalker) Just to note that per WP:SONGCOVER, if it can't be sourced or if there's nothing more to say than "XXXX covered the song on the 2019 album...", it should probably be removed... simply the fact that someone did a version of the song live once or recorded it on an album isn't notable, unless there has been some independent coverage and discussion of the cover. Richard3120 (talk) 14:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - Y Done for this section. Thank you for the info @Richard3120:! I removed the Holly Kenyon cover 'cause I can't find a reliable source to back it up, plus, I think it's not notable enough to be included here anyway. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:53, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Formats and track listings

Good

Personnel and credits

Should be split into two columns, one for performing artists and one for the technical aspects
- Y Done. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Accolades

Per WP:USEPROSE, there should be some actual prose here, not just the chart
- Y Done. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:40, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

References

Unclear how you got the "Archived from the original" etc. italicized, but it shouldn't be
Sugarscape is inconsistently italicized throughout
[92] (Sugarscape) should be in title case per MOS:ALLCAPS
- Y Done for this section. ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 12:58, 24 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Images are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks good

Apologies for taking so long, I have been inundated with work and the holiday. Putting on hold now. — Ghost River 18:30, 29 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It's alright! I'm done implementing your suggested changes for this article. If you have any more, please do inform me. Thank you! ɢᴀʙʙʏᴍɪx01 07:54, 30 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- I trimmed down the synopsis quite a bit. Please change any material that is inaccurate, as I have not seen the video, but I believe I cut most of the cruft. Looking good to pass now. — Ghost River 23:17, 3 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]