Talk:BioShock: The Collection/GA1

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 00:09, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Shall leave comments soon. ♦ jaguar 00:09, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"BioShock: The Collection is a collection of the BioShock video games" - would 'compilation' be more apt?
The second paragraph of the lead is on the short side and would benefit from summarising critics' views. I recall the game being criticised for its bugs upon release. Expand a little after "Critical reception of The Collection was generally positive..."
"The game was a bestselling title in the US and UK" - minor, but I would write United States and United Kingdom fully, but feel free to ignore

Contents

"...contains all three titles in the BioShock video game series" - seems redundant
The Contents section is missing basic information on series gameplay. I'm looking at Halo: The Master Chief Collection for reference here - I'd mention a very brief sentence or two about its gameplay mechanics, like: The games combine first-person shooter and role-playing elements...

Reception

The reception section is perhaps on the short side, but acceptable for GA.
"Game Revolution's Peter Paras and praised" - needless conjunction
NintendoLife's score is missing in the table. I also note that Game Revolution isn't italicised. I personally don't italicise websites, but NintendoLife is here
"More critically, Derek Taal said that the gameplay " - who's this? Who's he writing for?

This is overall a solid article. The sources are all of good standard. I've noted some minor concerns such as the lead not including a summary of critics' views and there are also some minor tweaks to be done to the reception. Otherwise this is comprehensive enough for GA, seeing as it's a compilation. On hold ♦ jaguar 00:25, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Jaguar: Hey, thanks for the review. I believe I've addressed all of the above points (pulled in a few sources to add a bit about the gameplay, since most of the reviews just gloss over it, consistently italicized the websites so they're uniform, cleaned up the minor text stuff.) Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ^talk 21:02, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks David. With those minor issues out the way this meets the GA criteria, so let's get this promoted.

♦ jaguar 16:17, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]