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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:10, 2 February 2015 (UTC)
OK - will jot notes as I go. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:10, 2 February 2015 (UTC)
I'd meld the lead into 2 or 3 paragraphs with no standalone sentences
The club also finished second in numerous competitions, finishing second in the league five times and runners-up in seven cup finals, including the 1975 European Cup. - could rejig this to use the word "second" (or "runners-up") only once....
religion based- needs a hyphen I think...
The 1967–68 season had a slow start but soon picked up...- the season or the club had a slow start?
despite the player wanting the move to go ahead as he desperately wanted to return to Scotland to be with his fiancée- could try to trim this. "despite the player wanting to return to Scotland to be with his fiancée" (middle redundant I think)
He made the club more professional for the 1979–80 campaign, introducing massages and changing the canteen and the team kit- let facts speak for themselves --> "He introduced massages and changed the canteen and team kit for the 1979–80 campaign,"
NB: I've merged some short paras - keeping them strictly season-by-season makes the prose a bit too choppy. Have merged some but check for flow.
Overall an engaging read. GA status is feasible once some fixes are done. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:25, 2 February 2015 (UTC)
- @Casliber: 40 days have passed since this review was placed on review. Are there outstanding fixes to be made? Thanks, C679 19:46, 14 March 2015 (UTC)
- whoops, I completely forgot about this one! ok, now just needs 2 [citation needed] tags need citing and I think we're done. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:23, 14 March 2015 (UTC)
- OK, done that, thanks.--EchetusXe 00:16, 15 March 2015 (UTC)
- whoops, I completely forgot about this one! ok, now just needs 2 [citation needed] tags need citing and I think we're done. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:23, 14 March 2015 (UTC)
1. Well written?:
- Prose quality:
- Manual of Style compliance:
2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
- References to sources:
- Citations to reliable sources, where required:
- No original research:
3. Broad in coverage?:
- Major aspects:
- Focused:
4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
- Fair representation without bias:
5. Reasonably stable?
- No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):
6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
- Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
- Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- great, well done. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:44, 15 March 2015 (UTC)