Talk:Big Apple Rappin'/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• "Big Apple Rappin" lead has lost the apostrophe on Rappin'

Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "The album is " could probably link album as so far you haven't said what it is!

I've changed the earlier statement to say "compilation album". Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "Johan Kugelberg. Kugelberg had" repetitive.

Changed phrasing. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "period "Rappers Delight" became" Rapper's

Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "was predominantly The music is primarily hip hop with a disco backing track first became a hit and describe the compilation as a collection of "the first great records."" just too weird for me to parse.

Wow what word soup I wrote. I think i've made it alright now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "Along with the music compiled was photography and flyers" -> "Along with the music, photography and flyers were compiled...

Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "research and compiling of the" compilation.

changed. 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "five star rating" five-star

Changed. 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "Division of Rare and Manuscript Collections" is this notable enough for a redlink?

I'm not sure. I'll leave it blank for now as i'd have to do some research on that. It's a little out of my area of knowledge. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "based person who" person is a really odd way of saying it.

I've re-phrased it slightly based on the description of him here. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "culture history collecting" comma after history.

done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "Kugelberg collection of early hip hop material was done" -> "Kugelberg's collection of early hip hop material was made"

done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "genre as staggeringly difficult" POV for an encyclopedia.

I've re-phrased this as this is Kugelberg's own words, which i think is not against POV. It should have been in quotes. Thoughts? Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "the "Born in the Bronx" book" italics for book titles.

Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "release of "Rappers Delight" and " Rapper's

" Apparently basic grammar alludes me. I've changed it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "and R&B backed-tracks" R&B-backed tracks.

Updated. I've also changed R&B to link to Rhythm & Blues to avoid a re-direct. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "the Village Voice" the should be inside the link.

changed The Village Voice link. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• ""A fine new ... one too many "

Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• "success of "Rapper's Delight."" should be 'Rapper's Delight'"

I think I've changed what you wanted here. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• No indication of what formats the release was made on?

I've added some information on that to the release section. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• Any indication of chart/sales perfomances?

Nothing I could find. As a Various artists album or the label. Can't find anything on Officialcharts or Billboard relating to it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• Caz image should use the upright parameter.

That's a little new to me but I believe i've added it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 5 needs en-dash, not hyphen, in the year range.

i've added the en-dash (–) to it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• Date formats should be consistent, DMY, MDY, pick one.

I've made them consistent. Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)Big Apple Rappin'

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:41, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

I think i've addressed all your issues @The Rambling Man:. Anything else? Andrzejbanas (talk) 16:56, 4 September 2021 (UTC)