Talk:Beta Breuil

This article is within the scope of WikiProject Biography, a collaborative effort to create, develop and organize Wikipedia's articles about people. All interested editors are invited to join the project and contribute to the discussion. For instructions on how to use this banner, please refer to the documentation.BiographyWikipedia:WikiProject BiographyTemplate:WikiProject Biographybiography

Women writers Low‑importance

	This article is within the scope of WikiProject Women writers, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of women writers on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Women writersWikipedia:WikiProject Women writersTemplate:WikiProject Women writersWomen writers
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.

Women's History Low‑importance

	History portal This article is within the scope of WikiProject Women's History, a collaborative effort to improve the coverage of Women's history and related articles on Wikipedia. If you would like to participate, please visit the project page, where you can join the discussion and see a list of open tasks.Women's HistoryWikipedia:WikiProject Women's HistoryTemplate:WikiProject Women's HistoryWomen's History
Low	This article has been rated as Low-importance on the project's importance scale.

Untitled

Hi Julia!

I made some comments about grammatical things I thought would be appropriate. The first one, under "Early Life" when you say Breuil was involved with something of a scandal, maybe change the wording or explain the scandal.

The second one I made was in "After Vitagraph" I think the wording free lancer should be changed to free lance worker or self employed.

In the first line you say nom de plume, I wasn't sure what that meant, so I was thinking you could make nom de plume a link to the wikipedia definition of that phrase if there is one.

Lastly, which I'm sure you're aware of, you have a "Filmography" section with no information under.

This was very well written though and nicely done, much better than my sandbox submission as I have no idea how to write in code to make it look like yours does!