Talk:Behold a Pale Horse (film)/GA1
GA Review
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This article has failed its GA nomination. Issues include:
The lead is insufficient, as evidenced by the cleanup banner at the top. See WP:LEAD and remember that the lead must be an overview of the entire article.- The prose does not yet meet the "well-written" standard. Examples:
"Behold a Pale Horse is a 1964 film directed by Fred Zinnemann, based on the novel Killing a Mouse on Sunday by Emeric Pressburger, which itself is loosely based on the life of the Spanish anarchist guerrilla, Francisco Sabaté Llopart." A rather long sentence, and it has unnecessary commas."The film is the story of a Catalan guerrilla exiled in France after the Spanish Civil War returning to Catalonia to visit his mother." Very choppy and initally confusing; it almost sounded like the "Spanish Civil War" returned to Catalonia."Opening on shots from the Spanish Civil War, and a line of Spanish refugees crossing the border into France after defeat by the Francoists, Manuel Artiguez turns away from the border and back towards Spain." Should be, "The movie opens...""However, once inside the hospital, he kills a few officers, but is finally shot himself. "
- Inline citations should be consistently formatted. Web citations should have publishers and last access dates in addition to URLs and title.s
"One of the film's stars, Omar Sharif, went so far as to refer to it as a "bad film" by a "good director".[12]" The tone of "went so far" is not very encyclopedic.The stubby paragraphs should be merged, and the "Home video release history" should probably be integrated into the previous section.- File:Behold pale horse score.jpg – the fair use rationale is weak and does not explain why the image adds to the article.
- The "Score" section is stubby and needs more references.
- Are you sure that you have exhausted all available sources? A simple Google Book reveals this. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:49, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
