Talk:Bay Area Rapid Transit/to do
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The lead is too short, for an article of this size it should be about three paragraphs. See WP:LEAD.- We need to incorporate a bunch of information from this article. It has lots of (seemingly) factual information and provides some insight into the first years of the system's operation.
- There's no shortage of material related to this source. Some of it has been added: ATC design safety, retaliatory firings, IEEE and CSPE reports, Post reports, Fremont flyer train crash, PUC oversight; PUC, legislative and NTSB investigations, financial irregularities, manual train controls, one month of hearings by the state legislature, management shake-up, GM fired, entire board of directors restructured and replaced, service to San Francisco delayed by three years, and the "BART case" as a topic of ethics courses.—166.107.163.254 (talk) 22:27, 29 March 2017 (UTC)
- The article needs going over with a fine-toothed comb to smooth out awkward prose. Taking the first paragraph of the first section as an example:
As of the 22 June 2003, opening date of the extension to San Francisco International Airport and Millbrae, the BART system comprises 104 miles (167 km) of track and 43 stations. reads awkwardly - something like "Following the opening of an extension to San Francisco International Airport and Millbrae on 22 June 2003, the BART system comprises 104 miles (167 km) of track and 43 stations." would be better.2nd and 3rd sentences - the fact that the guage is non-standard is repeated.Last sentence - the words "This" and "relatively" are redundant.- The specific examples above have been fixed, but the whole article needs to be examined thoroughly for similar problems
- Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:MOSDATE, months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries can be linked if they provide context for the article.
- Per WP:CONTEXT and WP:BTW, years with full dates should be linked; for example, link January 15, 2006, but do not link January 2006.
- Per WP:MOSNUM, there should be a non-breaking space -
between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 18mm, use 18 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 18 mm. – someone has done some of this, but we need to double-check the rest - Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise.