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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
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Should do this article today or tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Target Batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
- Remove the formats
- Remove target on Madonna Ciccone per WP:OVERLINK
- Link to the music video in the infobox
- "It was written by Madonna" → "The song was written by Madonna
- "and produced by Madonna and Mirwais" → "while produced by Madonna and the latter of the three"
- ""Batuka" features the" → "It features the"
- "group who play drums" → "group that play drums" with the appropriate wikilink removal since it is obvious
- "and lyrically it deals about" → "and the lyrics of the song are about"
- "received positive reviews" → "received generally positive reviews"
- Only one reviewer called it "hypnotic"; try and replace this with something else, though I may have further comment(s) about that once you have
- "An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was"
- "and tried to recreate the" → "which was an attempt to recreate the"
- "met the group and" → "met the Batukadeiras Orchestra, as well as"
- ""Batuka" was included on" → "The song was included on"
- "with the Batukadeiras Orchestra in a semi-circle playing drums" → "with the group performing in a semi-circle, playing drums,"
Background and recording
[edit]- On the text box, add a dash before Madonna's name to present the quote better
- "In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
- "its members ranked from teenage girls" → "the members ranged from teenage girls"
- "Madonna described their first encounter as an" → "Madonna described her first encounter with them as an"
- "experience. The music was" → "experience". She continued, stating that the "music was"
- Remove target on Madame X
- "which she encouraged them to just repeat" → "that she encouraged the Batukadeiras Orchestra to "just repeat""
- Remove wikilink on translator
- "according to the singer, they" → "according to Madonna, the group"
- "that they all pray together" → "on everyone in the studio all praying together"
- "they blessed Madonna" → "the Batukadeiras Orchestra blessed Madonna"
- "commented about the moment," → "commented on the moment,"
- "encounter it was"." → "encounter it was."" since that is a full sentence quotation
- Target feminist to Feminism
- "because she felt it sounded" → "due to her feeling it sounded"
- "called it "Batuka" because" → "retitled the song to "Batuka" because,"
- "played by women"." → "played by women.""
Composition
[edit]- Retitle to Composition and lyrics
- "Madonna, Mirwais Ahmadzaï and David Banda" → "Madonna, Mirwais and Banda" with the appropriate target
- "production was in charge of the singer and Ahmadzaï" → "production was handled by the singer and Mirwais"
- "David was the only one" → "Banda was the only one"
- Target batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
- [6][7] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
- "It features drums played" → "The song features drums played" with the removed wikilink
- [8][9] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [1]
- "with the orchestra singing their own solos in Cape Verdean Creole language" → "with the group singing their own solos in the Cape Verdean Creole language"
- "Its lyrics deal about" → "The lyrics deal with"
- [8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [10][11]
- "The line "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can’t stop us" was" → "The lyrics "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can't stop us" were"
- "reference to the current" → "reference to current"
- [12][15] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
Critical reception
[edit]- "According to Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly, the song" → "Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly stated the song"
- [17] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [18]
- "Opinion that was shared" → "C.M.'s opinion was shared"
- "Nick Smith, it" → "Nick Smith, the song"
- [20] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [21]
- "According to Xavi Sancho from El País, the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "Xavi Sancho from El País wrote that the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
- "that "Batuka" successfully" → "that the song successfully"
- "as well as calling it" → "while calling it"
- "opined it" → "opined that the song"
- "that accompanied by the" → "that her accompanied by the"
- "Kristi Kates from Northern Express newspaper" → "Kristi Kates of the Northern Express newspaper"
- "was also positive," → "was similarly positive,"
- "noted that "Batuka" was one" → "noted that the song was one"
- "Wren Graves of" → "In a mixed review, Wren Graves of"
- "to the song, but called it" → "to "Batuka", though called the song"
- "came from Daniel Megarry from" → "was provided by Daniel Megarry from"
- "who classified it" → "who ranked it"
- "Zilch"." → "Zilch.""
Music video
[edit]- "Filming for the music video for "Batuka"" → "Filming of the music video for "Batuka"" with the wikilink
- "in April 2019, in" → "during April 2019 in"
- "Julião, in" → "Julião of"
- "who also directed the music video" → "who was also director of the video"
- Add year in brackets for "Dark Ballet"
- [32] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
- Remove wikilink on Refinery29
- "how she met the group" → "how she met the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
- "looked like a typical house" → "looked like a typical one"
- "as their first meeting place," → "for their first meeting place,"
- "She elaborated that she hoped it" → "Madonna elaborated, stating that she hoped it"
- "and how "expressive" she" → "as well as how "expressive" she"
- "and how she wanted to capture it in their" → "and having wanted to capture it in the"
- Img needs alt text
- "The video begins with the following message:" → "The music video begins with a message that reads,"
- "upon the women of the orchestre," → "on the women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra,"
- "as they sing, beat out" → "while they sing, beat out"
- "looking out to the" → "from which the group look out to the"
- "Madonna dances freestyle," → "Madonna performs a freestyle dance,"
- "and joined them"." → "and joined them.""
- "Upon its release, it received" → "The music video was met with"
- "Little Black Book website called the video" → "Little Black Book website staff called it"
- "and deemed it as a" → "while they deemed it as a"
- "Justin Ravitz from Refinery29 called the video" → "Ravitz branded the visual"
- [16] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [35][36]
- "labeled it as" → "staff both labeled it as"
- "noted how it references" → "noted how the video references"
- "Portuguese newspaper Público opined that" → "The staff of Público opined that"
- "According to Mike Nied from Idolator, "I'd say that she has" → "Mike Nied from Idolator said that "she has"
- "felt from the group" → "felt from the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
Live performance
[edit]- "fourteen of the twenty two women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "14 of the 22 women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra while performing"
- "It began with the Orchestra gathering around" → "The performance began with the group gathering around"
- "was sitting to the side" → "sat to the side"
- "and doing some" → "and they did some"
- I rewrote it as "and she did some" because Madonna was the one dancing, as ref 38 says Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
- Think you could add the date of the performance somewhere?
- The performance was part of a tour which happened between 2019 and 2020, as stated in the article Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
- [41] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [42]
- "while according to Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic it was" → "while Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic said it was"
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Wikilink Madonna to herself
- Target vocals to Singing
- Credits and personnel adapted from the Madame X album liner notes.[4] → Credits and personnel adapted from the liner notes of Madame X.[4]
References
[edit]- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Copyvio score is too high at 54.8%; fix quoting from ref 1 to decrease this
- Remove or replace ref 5 per WP:RSP
- Remove wikilink on Us Weekly for ref 17
- MusicOMH → musicOMH on ref 20
- Cite Ericeira Mag in the website/work layout instead for ref 30
External links
[edit]- Remove video from here
- Are you ok with the audio link? Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
- Yeah, that's fine --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold after a nice review of this one! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:24, 6 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake
Done; take a look above Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass after the successful fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)