Talk:Battle of Masan/GA1

GA Review

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OK, I will review this article over the next couple of days.

Check list

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Comments

Lead&Infobox:
- Consistency. Are the belligerents UN or US and South Korea?
  - Depends on the context. Politically, South Korea was not a part of the UN in 1950, so South Korea and the US had a joint military venture in the battle, per the infobox. But the South Korean troops fell under the United Nations command, per the text. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Casualties. Don't add up with the Aftermath section. I count 1057 killed, 3085 wounded and 20 captured or missing. No South Korean casualties given.
  - Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Battle
- The part on North Korean conscription of South Korean civilians deserves a subsection. Possibly add a couple of sentences on their loyalty, combat value and desertions, possibly comparing these problems to similar problems for the 24th Infantry.
  - Done. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- T-34 picture. Perhaps change the caption to "T-34 tanks like this one..."
  - Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- A map (or even a simple schematic) would help. I do not know Korean geography very well and the battle is difficult to follow for an average reader, who would not read the entire article in detail.
  - Expanded. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Aftermath
- Needs expansion. What was wider strategic impact of the battle? How did it affect the Battle of Pusan as a whole?
  - Done. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Dab links: 25th Infantry Division, 25th Division, Armored Car, Haman need to be fixed D2306 (talk) 11:36, 3 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: D2306 (talk) 19:54, 2 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've responded to everything. Thanks for your review! —Ed!^(talk) 04:36, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comments

I think this is a good article. The only comment is again on South Korea losses. Probably a quick mentions that some of the 40,000 casualties of the Battle of Pusan occurred there.D2306 (talk) 11:32, 5 January 2011 (UTC)[reply]