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Short description: Battle during First Kashmir war
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I have nothing to do with this but just reminding the reviewer about this page in case they forgot (considering it has already been 10 days). Setergh (talk) 11:55, 26 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
@Setergh, my apologies, I got caught up with other wiki work. @Rahim231, my comments:
Is the QF 3.7-inch mountain howitzer the same as the 3.7-inch howitzer deployed by Pakistani forces? If so, consider linking?
Add alt text for the Chunj features image?
I cannot access the following source: "Historical Section, GS Branch GHQ, The Kashmir Campaign 1947-48 (Rawalpindi: Historical Section, 1970), 159". I believe it is a classified document, or at the very least not accessible outside Pakistan. If you can provide a URL then this source can be accepted. Otherwise it will have to be removed because it cannot be cross-checked.
Add the page number for ref #17, the article by JS Bajwa?
If Sen 1994 and Riza 1997 have more details you could add to the article, I would recommend that you move them to the bibliography. Generally, a Further reading section is recommended only when there are already a lot of citations in the article, say more than 150-200.
I've made some copyedits, please let me know if those are alright. The article is otherwise in a good shape, and I think it can be promoted once these changes are done. Matarisvan (talk) 18:46, 28 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Once again, this obviously isn't my GA review, but I just quickly wanted to mention that I do think the QF 3.7-inch mountain howitzer is the same as the 3.7-inch howitzer after reading the source, and either way I'm rather certain that this is the only 3.7 inch mountain gun to exist. Setergh (talk) 19:00, 28 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah i was gonna do that since the previous book cited is a classified document unavailable to the public other then government officials and it is the official history of the 1947 War from Pakistan side.
4- Removed citation (Since it didn't contain info related it)
5- a) Sen 1944 does not mention the details of this event or the just calling it a Toothless offensive and Riza 1997 makes mention of the event and the already included information. other than that he mentions positions assumed by troops in other sectors
I think this article is worthy of GA-class personally, although obviously the reviewer decides.
Just wanted to mention though, does the lead really need citations in this case? I'm pretty sure it's just info taken from the article, therefore I see no point. MOS:Lead states that "A lead section should be carefully sourced as appropriate, although it is common for citations to appear in the body and not the lead."
Personally, considering the information in the lead is quite literally just taken from the rest of the article, the citations serve no purpose. Setergh (talk) 15:57, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I don't really see why you were told to do this, the lead should preferably go without them. But up to you honestly, doesn't change much lol Setergh (talk) 17:29, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
And congrats on the GA page (well I'm sure it will get it now that you've fixed everything)! Well deserved. Hopefully I'll manage to get one someday as well 🤷 Setergh (talk) 17:31, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks a lot brother. When i first started this i thought i would never be able to even get one GA like the succeeding battle of this one Battle of Pandu (its needs a lot of editing), u sure will get it if you keep up the good work ! Rahim231 (talk) 17:53, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Add the photographs of Ghulam Rasul and AM Sloan in the Military honors section?
Is there any new information in this link [1] you could use? It is a good source, and you should have access to it through The Wikipedia Library. If not, please let me know and I will send the PDF to you.
I learned about the Wiki library and got access the pdf, it sure has a lot of additional information as you said. I'm not sure how should i now incorporate it in the article now ? Rahim231 (talk) 09:59, 31 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
I'm rather confused, how are you not sure how to incorporate it into the article? You obviously aren't forced to add all details, but I'd recommend adding the details where you are certain where they'd fit into the article. Setergh (talk) 10:00, 31 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
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