Talk:Battle of Balikpapan (1945)/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 09:28, 26 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. I have some comments:

To the first sentence, I suggest adding ", the campaign to liberate Japanese-held British and Dutch Borneo" with links
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
comma after Operation Oboe Two
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
delete "on the island of Borneo" as it has now been introduced earlier
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
perhaps mention the Japanese commander when their numbers are mentioned
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"well-developed"
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
link Balikpapan, Samarinda
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
how had "the airfield had been badly damaged"? bombing or naval shelling, or both?
- Clarified. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
one degrees south
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
high at between 74–93 percent
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
the July to September period or drop the "the"
- Adjusted. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
the entire European population was executed? How many?
- Costello didn't say, but I've found a newspaper article that provides a total of between 80 and 100. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
could you convert oil barrels? And was this an annual total?
- Annual total; tweaked. Conversion added. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
facilities by an estimated 40 percent
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
full stop after Noemfoor
- Added. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The first two raids ~~initially~~ suffered heavy losses
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
and inflict~~ing~~ed minimal damage
- Apparently I speak English, but I'm not sure anymore... Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
is "mainly by Australian troops in New Guinea" fair given the Guadalcanal campaign?
- Added. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
link Coastal artillery and Anti-tank trench
- Added. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
by this stage I believe 1st Armoured Regiment was an AIF unit, not Militia
- Removed. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
U.S. vs US, I think the key is consistency per MOS:US
- Adjusted. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
link escort carrier and torpedo boat
- Linked. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
suggest "mainly from the 672nd and 727th Amphibian Tractor Battalions and the 593rd Engineer Boat and Shore Regiment"
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
move link to booby trap to first mention
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
comma after Lieutenant Colonel Tom Daly
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"was made during the throughout the morning"
- Adjusted. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
did the tanks capture Hill 87, of was it infantry supported by tanks?
- Clarified. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
company-assault→company assault
- Adjusted. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
suggest "were lavishly provided"
- Adjusted. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
more so than in any other
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
link Flamethrower and Mortar (weapon)
- Added. AustralianRupert (talk)
be consistent with measurements, either imperial or metric first throughout
- I think I've dealt with this now. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
in general, during the fighting, is information available about what Japanese units were being fought in each area?
- Not much detail that I can find, although I have clarified the situation a little further. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
when it took over from the 18th Brigade
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Meanwhile, Ppatrols
- Done. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
link David Horner
- Added. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I see that militarily the operation was dubious, but is there any discussion of the political aspects of the operation in terms of the early reinstatement of Dutch control of a significant oil production area?
- Added a bit more to this. AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Just the image review to go. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:33, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]

OK, that was pretty easy. Images and copyvio check all good. Just placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:42, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
- @Peacemaker67: G'day, PM, thanks for taking a look at this. I have made the following changes based on your comments above: [1]. Please let me know what you think of these. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 10:46, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - This is now in great shape, I hope to see it at ACR soon. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:12, 28 October 2019 (UTC)[reply]