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Reviewer: Tayi Arajakate (talk · contribs) 00:51, 28 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Assessment

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  1. Comprehension:
  2. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
    (b) (MoS) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
  3. Verifiability:
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    (a) (references) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
    (c) (original research) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) No copyright violation or plagiarism found; note there is backward copying. Pass Pass
  5. Comprehensiveness:
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    (a) (major aspects) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
    (b) (focused) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
  7. Neutrality:
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    The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
  9. Stability:
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    The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined
  11. Illustration:
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    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) No copyright violations but some images. (updated) Pass Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) The reviewer has left no comments here Neutral Undetermined

Review from Ovinus

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Not sure of the processes for changing reviewers, but whatever, here goes. I'll probably be making tweaks as I read; feel free to revert ones with which you disagree. Ovinus (talk) 05:09, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

On first blush the article seems okay, but there is a fair amount of work to do.

  • "is known for its pleasant climate throughout the year" – Why is this in the first paragraph? Or is Bangalore really defined by its nice climate? What is Bangalore truly important for—culturally, economically, etc. Ovinus (talk) 05:09, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, it has one of the best weather in India. Though it is changing in recent years. So shall I remove it? Kpddg (talk) 05:44, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Ovinus, I have replied to all the comments raised... Kpddg (talk) 05:55, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Ovinus? Kpddg (talk) 11:12, 15 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I apologize; been pretty busy in real life. I promise I'll get to it by Friday evening. Ovinus (talk) 05:14, 16 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Okay Kpddg (talk) 10:25, 16 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Happy with your changes above. Continuing (am quite enjoying the article so far):

A bit busy again, sorry—it's finals week. I'll get to finishing the review by Friday. :) Ovinus (talk) 16:29, 22 June 2022 (UTC) Continuing:[reply]

Quick note: if it's taking time, no need to link every relevant diff you make; after all, I'm checking the article :) Ovinus (talk) 03:51, 26 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Okay Kpddg (talk) 10:38, 27 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Spotchecks (uniform random distribution on [1, 307]):

  • [65]: Fine, [66] contains the real meat. Please add author and date information to [66] if at all possible
  • [68]: Excellent Green checkmarkY
  • [73]: Green checkmarkY
  • [78]: Green checkmarkY
  • [97]: AGF (don't want to corroborate a table...)
  • [122]:  Question: "a few of them have lineage dating back to Krishnadevaraya" doesn't seem to be supported
I did not find any source, so I removed the statement Kpddg (talk) 15:58, 27 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • [150]: Green checkmarkY
  • [153]: Green checkmarkY
  • [165]:  Question: don't see anything mentioning the 60% figure
  • [181]: Green checkmarkY
  • [183]: Green checkmarkY
  • [201]: Fine
  • [218]: Green checkmarkY
  • [224]: Green checkmarkY
  • [231]: Can't see how this is supported by the source
  • [244]: AGF
  • [279]: Green checkmarkY
  • [296]: Archive link is broken for me

Spotchecks are generally good. I suspect the errors are citation mixups.

  • citation needed for terrorist attacks
Each terrorist attack has its own article, so are citations needed? Kpddg (talk)
Sure, I suppose that falls under WP:You don't need to cite that the sky is blue. I'd link them, though. Ovinus (talk) 17:07, 27 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Each attack is already linked Kpddg (talk) 12:56, 28 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • "60,000 people who have an investment surplus of ₹45 million (US$590,555) and ₹5 million (US$65,600) respectively" respectively to what? Also, put an "as of" for this sentence
This is the complete sentence : ...home to over 10,000 millionaires and about 60,000 people who have an investment surplus of ₹45 million (US$590,555) and ₹5 million (US$65,600) respectively. I added the 'as of'. Kpddg (talk)
The construction is slightly confusing: the 10,000 count is restricted to millionaires with a certain investment surplus? Ovinus (talk) 17:07, 27 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Simplified the sentence to make it clear Kpddg (talk) 13:24, 30 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I think I'm mostly done. Will have to take another quick pass after everything is addressed. Ovinus (talk) 01:55, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I think I've responded to all comments till now.... Kpddg (talk) 14:09, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Great! A few responses above and I'll skim the article again. Ovinus (talk) 15:38, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Final concerns:

  • Still a failed verification for Since India's independence, schools for young children (ages 16 months to 5 years) are called nurseries, kindergartens or play schools, and are broadly based on Montessori or multiple intelligence methodology of education. None of the sources afait contain the word "nurseries", "kindergartens", etc. and they don't say that schools are broadly based on xyz theory, but that some schools are (whichever schools they are writing about). [3] might have something, but it's fairly obscure. Ovinus (talk) 17:32, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Removed Kpddg (talk) 11:32, 13 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]


After these are addressed, I think I'm happy. Since the original reviewer dropped out and this was essentially my review, I will procedurally fail it, then you can renominate it and I'll immediately pass it (so that it's marked as reviewed by me). Ovinus (talk) 17:32, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Ovinus, I have addressed them. Kpddg (talk) 11:33, 13 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, I'll actually just pass per comments on WT:GAN. Well done! Ovinus (talk) 23:39, 13 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you!! The article has improved a lot. Kpddg (talk) 11:39, 14 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]