Talk:Bangai-O/GA1

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 02:26, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I wouldn't abbreviate the publisher ESP in the lead as it hasn't been introduced yet.
- Done
Perhaps wikilink 'boss' again in the Gameplay section
- Done
"Also, the shop is removed" - the shop hasn't been introduced yet so saying it has been removed is somewhat confusing. I'd introduce it and how it works into the above paragraph
- Done
"renamed it Bangai-O from Bakuretsu Muteki Bangaioh" - so just confirming, the original title is Bakuretsu Muteki Bangaioh. If so, shouldn't that be mentioned in the lead? Or possibly even be the article's title?
- It is simply the Japanese title, and since it doesn't make much literal sense to an English reader, it's footnoted in the first sentence. I just now copied the footnote and placed at the end of this sentence too and modified the wording. It is not the title used in western releases and not the common name so it shouldn't be the article title.
"By February, publishers" - I'd clarify February 2000, as you later use 'in May that year' though the year hasn't been explicitly stated
- Done
"Critics enjoyed the manic and unique gameplay that is characteristic of Treasure video games" - this seems slightly POV. Perhaps reword slightly.
- Changed to "Critics enjoyed the manic and unique gameplay that they believed was characteristic of Treasure's video games."
I feel like ref 8 (Danylenko) should have a 'work' or 'publisher' parameter in its reference. University of Barcelona?
- Yea it should. Added.

Really great work. Looking forward to passing once minor issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 02:26, 27 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]