Talk:Bad Girl (Avril Lavigne song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Drown Soda (talk · contribs) 06:33, 2 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MagicatthemovieS: THis is my review of the article; I only have a handful of comments that I think need addressed for this to pass as GA.

Lead

Lavigne and Manson have been friends for years, and were once falsely rumored to be dating. --this seems too involved to be in the lead, and I think is better part of the Background section only.
Maybe it's just me, but "creepy" strikes me as a bit informal/unencyclopedic. Maybe "unseemly" or something of the sort would be a better option?

Background

Everything reads nicely here. No real issues with prose.

Composition

I'm assuming "cruching guitars" is a typo for "crunching" or "crushing"?
"pints"----"points"
Billboard named it a "salacious, sloppy, muddied rock music - as it damn well should be," -- "a" is an extra/unneeded article

Credits and personnel

There may or may not be a standard rule on this, but from my experience with music articles, the person should be listed with their role following, not the other way around (i.e. "Avril Lavigne — backing, lead vocals," not "Backing, lead vocals – Avril Lavigne"). I do think the former makes more sense and is easier to navigate as far as list-form information goes.

Sources

These seem to check out, and are appropriately archived/formatted.

Overall: This article is very close to passing; there are a few minor things I have pointed out above, but they are mostly minor technical issues and not related to the substance of the article here. On hold

--Drown Soda (talk) 06:33, 2 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Drown Soda: I addressed all of your concerns.MagicatthemovieS (talk) 17:27, 2 November 2018 (UTC)MagicatthemovieS[reply]

@MagicatthemovieS: Thanks, looks in good shape. --Drown Soda (talk) 19:03, 2 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]