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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- "He was a co-founder of the company that first made the product in America." - I think some clarification on what "made the product" means will help things here
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- "He was a businessman and involved" - think the word in bold is unneeded
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- The extra space between the paragraph and the early life section is not needed
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- Church's death place is missing from the infobox
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Early life
[edit]- Better to use the née template on the term's sole mention
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- "However, Church did finish high school" - how about was able to finish
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- "In 1826 he moved and practiced in Cooperstown, New York, and in 1829 he moved to" - repetition of the word "moved"
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Career
[edit]- "10,000 tons" - the [convert: needs a number] template is better off used here
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- "but a recent investor in the company objected." - what were the reasons (if any) given to this objection?
Done - Williams quote. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- Wikilink Vulcan to the appropriate article
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- "to sell the Arm & Hammer Baking Soda product for hundreds of uses" - what sort of uses?
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:23, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
Philantrophy
[edit]- generous contributor to various charities across the country." - Any notable charities? Any type of charities?
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:31, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
References
[edit]- newspapers.com is spelt as Newspapers.com
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 6's page number should be D13 instead of 100
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 7 should include United Press International as the agency
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 9 is missing the author and the page number is C9 not 29
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 13 is missing the author
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- Reference 16 is missing the author
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:15, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
Sources
[edit]- "Rice, Randall Peter. Beyond The Bottom Line... Randall Peter Rice. The Arm & Hammer trademark came from another Church family business, Vulcan Spice Mills." - the date is missing here
Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:22, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator time to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 16:56, 23 August 2020 (UTC)
- @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:33, 24 August 2020 (UTC)
- @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 13:54, 24 August 2020 (UTC)