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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 18:18, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Can review, shortly Eddie891 Talk Work 18:18, 27 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • I feel like the lede sentence could be a bit more explicitly phrased than just calling it an 'incident' -- that doesn't really tell us much about it
  • The background could be broken up into a couple of paras
  • "Shortly thereafter, the neighborhood became the sight of blockbusting," is it really a 'sight' or maybe 'the neigborhood began to see blockbusting' or smth similar?
  • For images, I think a map of the subdivision where the wall was (bonus points if you can draw a line approximately where the wall was) and/or an image of the mayor would be helpful. I also think you can upload an image under fair use, as the wall isn't around anymore and nobody can go out and take a picture
    • Added an image of Cook from Wikimedia Commons, and I'll look into adding an image of the wall itself (I've seen a few of the barricade online), but unfortunately I'm not that knowledgeable with regards to uploading copyrighted media to Wikipedia. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 21:58, 7 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which was quickly signed into law by Allen, and work on the barricade started the next day" unclear if 'quickly' means the same day and consequently, it's unclear what day 'the next day' is
  • "was one of the only aldermen to vote against the barricade" what about the others?
  • what would Cook's legislation have done and why is it relevant to this article?
  • "800 acres (320 ha) of land north of Peyton Forest to serve as a residential area for African Americans" what was the land zoned as before? was it zoned explicitly for African Americans to live there?
  • what was the boycott of?
  • "A statement signed by Martin Luther King Sr." do you have a date?
  • "On January 7, 1963, Atlanta's board of aldermen again voted in favor of keeping the barricade in place" had they voted in favor of keeping it in place previously?
  • "The incident is seen " seen by who?
  • Can you expand at all on the protests? I feel like there's more to say-- but may be wrong there. It particularly feels like Undaunted by the Fight may have some more detail
  • Looks really good so far, I've still got to spotcheck sourcing and check for comprehensiveness. Eddie891 Talk Work 20:32, 30 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Source checks

Hi, thanks for the review, should be able to address all the issues and points raised here over the next few days, will notify you when all issues are addressed. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 23:16, 30 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hey Eddie891, just pinging you to let you know that I've made some edits to the page and attempted to address all the points you raised in this review, and that if there are any murky points or further clarification or anything to let me know! -JJonahJackalope (talk) 21:58, 7 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]