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Serious problems with the expansion

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WikiEnthusiast1001, thanks for your interest in this subject. However, I am afraid there are serious problems with the expansion and reorganisation you have done over the last few months. Here are just a few that are apparent from a cursory glance.

  • The lead is ridiculously long. One or two paragraphs are what is normal for a page like this. Moreover the lead should not be a story, it is meant to be a summary.
  • The citations have been reorganised. I had used sfn citations, which you removed for some reason. You are reusing a 30-page range of Dani's book for almost everything. This is not correct. A citation should cite one or two pages.
  • Many citations are incomplete. All citations should have author, title, and where published (newspaper, magazine, journal etc.). Some of the sources also seem to be of poor quality.
  • I had cited an article from Nation, for the "bewildered" phrase. The phrase is still there, but the citation is gone. This is losing WP:INTEGRITY.
  • There are too many images, and some of them are of poor quality.

All said and done, this is looking like a fan site, rather than an encyclopedia article. Unless these problems are corrected, I will be forced to revert the entire expansion. -- Kautilya3 (talk) 01:04, 24 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Despite writing such a long story, your lead fails to explain what was achieved by Aslam Khan in the First Kashmir War, which my lead did in one short paragraph. -- Kautilya3 (talk) 01:30, 24 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I notice that you had removed the maps that were present earlier as well. Perhaps you are not even interested in what he had accomplished? -- Kautilya3 (talk) 01:52, 24 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
You could help in rewriting the lead. I agree that it contains too much detail. Could you help revise it by combining details from your original lead and the version I've written? Besides the image featuring General Elvin S. Ligon Jr., which other image do you find to be of poor quality? WikiEnthusiast1001 (talk) 06:08, 24 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, I can take care of the lead. Please work on the other issues, the citations especially. -- Kautilya3 (talk) 08:31, 24 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]