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Reviewer: Ssriram mt (talk · contribs) 22:25, 24 September 2013 (UTC) I will take up the review of the article.[reply]

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1. Well-written:
1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. There are lot of spelling mistakes (outlaying, kinda) and the sentence formation needs a total revamp.
1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. Lead is not explanatory. There are links to even common words and multi-links all through. The see also/further reading sections have links which are already in the article. Bullets, parenthesis, quotes and bold letters are seen in most places. There are quite some vernacular texts like gana-samghas that need meanings and informal texts like "So, it can't be understand by assuming".
2. Verifiable with no original research:
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. There are quite some duplicate references (like Indian History and Age of the Nandas and Mauryas) and some of the references lack the basic parameters like publisher, first, last names and accessdate.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). School books, UPSC prep books are not reliable refs.
2c. it contains no original research. Dhamma was a non-religious principle, but it is written in a tone the indicates it was implemented to circumvent existing discrimination in Hinduism. Most references quote Buddhism and Jainism rather than Hinduism. Some portions in the Historical background section fails 2b. A peer-review would be needed before this portion is subject to further GAN.
3. Broad in its coverage:
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). The sections need a reordering - what is Dhamma, when, why and how it was implemented and finally the post-effects.
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. There are undue texts in the interpretation section like " However, one should remember that he was not establishing a new religion." and "Ashoka's "Dhamma" could not survive him". It is quoted as a failure, but it is universally accepted everywhere even outside his kingdome.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. image alt needs to be added.
7. Overall assessment. Since there are lot of comments that would need time to fix, i am failing it for now. The article can be submitted to WP:GOCE and a peer-review before subjecting it to GAN.