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GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:34, 31 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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  • No comma needed after "and businessperson"
  • Comma after "March 4, 1913" per MOS:DATECOMMA
  • "Raleigh County and served in this position until 1908" → "Raleigh County, a position he held until 1908"

Early life and education

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  • Comma after "March 25, 1878" per MOS:DATECOMMA
  • No parentheses around "and six sons"
  • ""Miller Bob,"" → ""Miller Bob"," per MOS:LQ
  • ""lizard glades."" → ""lizard glades"." per MOS:LQ
  • ""Owl River school."" → ""Owl River school"." per MOS:LQ

Early law and political careers

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  • To whom did he lose the 1910 election?
  • I have added in additional content regarding the 1910 Republican nominee selection process, in which Lilly lost to incumbent Hughes. Please let me know if this works, or if more or less detail is needed. Thanks again! -- West Virginian (talk) 15:13, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Attorney general

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  • No commas needed around "without opposition"

Virginia debt case

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  • Per MOS:LARGENUM, the significant sums described in this section should be rounded, as it doesn't appear that there's any significant reason to include the exact dollar and cent amounts

Later political career

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  • No comma needed after "for the Republican nomination"
  • A little more description on why the feud began would be nice

Business affairs

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  • the asbestos roof paint "Leak Not" to prevent leaks and black metal paint "Rust Not" to prevent rust. confusing syntax

Later life and death

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  • "which exceeded 20,000 attendees on its second day, and had notable attendees including" → "which exceeded 20,000 attendees on its second day. Notable attendees included"
  • Link World War II

Personal life

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  • "He and his wife had" → "Together they had"
  • Combine first two paras as they are both about his family, and it reduces the rate of 1-2 sentence paragraphs

References

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  • [17] and [20] are not duplicate refs but appear to be from a first glance; I'd recommend adding 1911 and 1914 in parentheses to distinguish
  • Per MOS:ALLCAPS, both of those refs should also be rendered in title case and not all caps

General comments

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  • Images are public domain and obviously relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Copyvio score looks good

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 16:08, 3 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

  • GhostRiver, I truly appreciate you taking the time to perform this thorough and comprehensive review for this GAN! The article is much improved because of your suggestions and recommendations, and I have addressed them all in the article. Please review and let me know if there are any outstanding issues that I can address in the meantime. Again, I appreciate your time and expertise! -- West Virginian (talk) 16:39, 5 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for making those changes, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 21:30, 7 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]
GhostRiver, it was a pleasure working with you throughout this process and I look forward to working with you again soon! Thanks again! — West Virginian (talk) 22:49, 7 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]