Talk:Armatix iP1

A fact from Armatix iP1 appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 3 March 2014 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that the Armatix iP1 pistol cannot access or function without iW1 Active RFID wrist watch?

A record of the entry may be seen at Wikipedia:Recent additions/2014/March. The nomination discussion and review may be seen at Template:Did you know nominations/Armatix iP1.

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Vulnerabilities

This report from Wired that the security of the system can be breached should be mentioned. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jra (talk • contribs) 09:29, 16 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Language

I found the article through DYK and was very disappointed in its language qualities. It appears that both the (sole) author and the DYK reviewer are native German speakers. While I was able to make sense of most of the article eventually, there are a few sentences that I still do not unterstand. Even the DYK text is wrong, in particular the "cannot access" bit, which makes no sense in English.

My suggestion is that the author (who appears to have researched into the matter quite thoroughly) writes an entry on the German Wikipedia page, which we can then translate once we know what the author really meant. MoogX (talk) 09:34, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Could you specifically tell where are the lacking areas / wording? --Anton^Talk 10:34, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The entire text is riddled with mistakes that make it hard to read. As I pointed out, the sentence "The Armatix iP1 cannot access or function without iW1 Active RFID wrist watch." doesn't make sense (what is it the gun cannot access?), and the part already cited by Colonies Chris (see below) makes no sense at all. Again, I suggest that you write the article in German (which I assume is your mother tongue) and let others correct this one. MoogX (talk) 11:33, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, I agree that it would have been better if this article had been copyedited before it was linked to on the Main Page. I've now copyedited it, although someone who knows more about guns should probably check my work. I also removed some marketing language - for example, I don't believe the price is encyclopedic. Yngvadottir (talk) 19:12, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I did my best to further edit the article without making any changes I'm not sure of. Maybe it would be worthwhile adding:

a statement early in the article what the novel features are good for (preventing unauthorized use, etc.);
a statement that this is the first commercially available unit of its type, if true;
a reference to the development effort hampered by pretended lack of interested by the big companies (H&K), if true. MoogX (talk) 19:40, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

What does this mean?

"After 10 years of research and the criticized as "extremely pro-gun", which give access to the owner only ..."

It reads as though some words are missing. Colonies Chris (talk) 10:16, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Numbers don't add up

"It is priced at US$ $2332 for both pistol ($1,399) and watch ($399)."

1399 + 399 = 1798. So where does 2332 come from? Colonies Chris (talk) 10:18, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

It was a mistake and corrected. --Anton^Talk 10:34, 3 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Background information

Here some informations from March 2014

The smart-gun controversy at Oak Tree Gun Club
Smart gun technology promising but needs reliability — Preceding unsigned comment added by Triebel (talk • contribs) 10:41, 29 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding "The pistol is chambered in .22 LR caliber and is fed via a 10-round detachable box magazine with an effective fire range of 75 yards (69 m)" It sounds as if the box magazine has a range of 75 meters by itself. Also, if they have a .22 capable of accuracy at 75 meters, they are seriously in the wrong arena and should just make Olympic target pistols. For example the Beretta 92 9mm has a (given by the military and the manufacturer) effective range of 50 meters, and this is stretching it considerably. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 161.184.219.74 (talk) 07:50, 1 June 2014 (UTC)[reply]