Talk:Arjun Reddy/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 00:03, 3 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

"The film tells the story of Dr. Arjun Reddy Deshmukh (Deverakonda), a high-functioning alcoholic surgeon who has anger management problems." — You can remove the "Dr." as you mention he's a surgeon right afterwards.
"filming also occurred" — "occurred" sounds a tad informal. "took place" sounds better.
"Arjun Reddy is a student in his final year" — Rephrase it as "Arjun Reddy is a final-year student"
"creating a public nuisance" can be written as "making a scene".

"He worked on the script of Arjun Reddy for two years and for four to five years approached producers who were not willing to finance the film until Vanga's brother Pranay Reddy agreed to produce the film." — Can be rephrased as "He worked on the script of Arjun Reddy for two years and for four to five years approached producers who were not willing to finance the project until Vanga's brother Pranay Reddy agreed to do so."
"For the same, whenever a twist came, Vanga used to work on it for three to four weeks." — Rephrase it as "For the same, whenever the idea for a plot twist came to him, Vanga used to work on it for three to four weeks." Link "plot twist" like this: plot twist.
"Vanga wrote the dialogue in a Hyderabad Telangana accent. He said Telugu cinema uses dialects spoken in Guntur and Vijayawada, of which he was unaware." — The sentences can be rephrased as "In a September 2017 interview with Sangeetha Devi Dundoo of The Hindu, Vanga said he believed that Telugu cinema uses dialects spoken in Guntur and Vijayawada. Since he was unaware of the way of speaking in both the places, he wrote the dialogue in a Hyderabad Telangana accent."
"He used rarely-used words like yaralu (sister in law) to make Arjun look real and rooted." — Rephrase it as "He made use of words that were rarely spoken in colloquial Telugu like yaralu (sister in law) to make Arjun look "real and rooted"." Add colons between "real and rooted".

I don't think the colons are necessary. Done with the rest. Pavanjandhyala 14:26, 5 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

What do you mean by "clash work"?
"but a delay in the shoot led to the insertion of a pipe in Deverakonda's trousers." — Can you find a wikilink for "pipe" for those readers who may not get it at first.

Done Pavanjandhyala 16:33, 6 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Nothing much about the subsequent sections. The sources look good too. Good work, Pavan. Resolve the remaining comments and the article will be promoted. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 06:53, 6 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Ssven2: Thanks for taking out time to review my nomination, sir. Awaiting the result. Regards, Pavanjandhyala 16:33, 6 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
Pass or Fail:

Thank you for addressing my comments, Pavanjandhyala. Congratulations, the article has passed. — Ssven2 ^{Looking at you, kid} 16:49, 6 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]