Talk:Ancient furniture/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: JackFromReedsburg (talk · contribs) 02:48, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. JackFromReedsburg (talk | contribs) 02:48, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

Mentioning that the Aztecs grew crops in their homes shouldn't be in the lead. It's not furniture related.
I suggest replacing it by saying that the Aztecs often didn't use furniture, and when they did it was fairly simple in design and construction.
Lots of short sentences make the prose feel choppy:
- Mesopotamia section:
  - Chairs would also have wooden and ivory finials depicting arms. These finials would have bull's heads. The chairs would be painted with many bright colors. -> Chairs would also have wooden and ivory finials depicting arms and the head of a bull. The chairs would typically be painted with many bright colors
  - People would also use wooden tables to hold meals or belongings. Rich people would often decorate their tables with metals. -> Wooden tables were used to hold meals or belongings. Rich people would often decorate their tables with metals.
  - Doors and doorframes might have been made of wood, and on occasion doors would be made of red ox-hide.
  - Mesopotamians would hide a crude statue in their house to ward off evil spirits. -> Crude statues would typically be hidden in order to ward off evil spirits.
  - I don't see a need to include 17 varieties of wood, as its fairly unremarkable, unless specific varieties were chosen for their particular characteristics.
  - Wealthy citizens would have chairs padded with felt, rushes, or palm wood. The chairs would also have leather upholstery. -> Wealthy citizens would have chairs padded with felt, rushes, or palm wood, and they would contain leather upholstery.
- Egypt section:
  - Most Egyptian furniture was wooden, but there was some stone furniture. -> Most furniture in Egypt was made of wood, but stone was not uncommon. or Egyptian furniture mainly composed of wood, with stone-built furniture a rarity, or Most Egyptian furniture was made of wood or stone.
  - There are depictions of a low-back ox-legged chair. There is also a portrait of Amenhotep III sitting in a low-back lion legged chair. Most couches and chairs in Ancient Egypt were animal furniture. Some of the legs would be the front legs of the animal, while the others would be the back legs. -> Most couches and chairs in Ancient Egypt were constructed from animals. There are depictions of a low-back ox-legged chair. Additionally, there is a portrait of Amenhotep III sitting in a low-back lion legged chair.
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All maintenance tags need to be resolved, including "clarification needed".
All images are correctly licenced
Copyvio check:
- this website copied from wikipedia, as that information was here prior to the blogpost.
I found references to be a bit lacking.
- The Dilmun section is only cited to one source. Please find additional sources, and put them inline.
- Encyclopedia Britannica is cited several times, which is a tertiary source. These are alright, but not ideal.
Remove many of the images in the Rome gallery. We can link to commons to show images (as we already have in the bottom).
Paragraphs are very long, and as such are harder to read. Please break them up into smaller chunks.
Much more attention is given to Greek and Roman furniture. I would appreciate if other culture's could be brought up to the same standard as the Greek and Roman sections.
- I suggest splitting off Greek and Roman furniture into their own articles as well, although it is not necessary for GA.
Other ancient american civilizations should be listed, not only the aztecs.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Discussion

This article as it currently stands fails criterion 1. It also partially fails criterion 4, although if no reliable sources existed about other ancient cultures than the ones listed, then it would pass. I do not believe that these issues can be fixed in the standard 1 week hold period, so I will be failing this nomination. I encourage you to take my feedback and bring this article up to the GA standard. JackFromReedsburg (talk | contribs) 17:22, 8 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]